Emerson

I watched you two meet ends as you wove yourself throughout the room. I've stared her down more than enough time knows that I am on the brink of doom. ...

Brad. You are amazing. It was shocking enough when we knew she was pregnant, but when she tells kyle, its like we are hearing it for the first time! I ...

*shudders* I really liked it! Pearls....and necks... you chose very nice words!! I felt like I wanted a little more from the third and fourth stanza, but I'm not sure...what. ...

You know, this poem has such a lovely theme. I really want to dig my fingers into it and change it up!!! But it is your poem, and your work.. ...

“Jonathon,” Kyle shook his hand. “Hey, what happened last night?” “Oh, sorry.” Jonathon shook his head and looked down at their touching hands. He pulled his slightly away. These bolded ...

It was good. I haven't a single complaint! Well, no. At one point, the dialog/action got weird and I couldn't see it happening (The fight) but eventually it picked back ...

You used punctuation! I thank you for that nice act. The poem did not always make sense, some parts were very blurred and easy to misunderstand. You also float on ...

and in recent times, Kyle new, for Kyle’s department of mathematics. missing the letter k in 'knew' fourteen hundred dollar chairs are there 14 $100 chairs, or $1,400 chairs? That ...

She saw in him the uncontrollable desire to self-destruct so prominent in every man she had ever loved, and it made her sad to see Jonathon this way. I ...don't ...

“Again? I wouldn’t want to do it all wrong and have to put them back on again, professor” missed the comma on the end. I loved the bit with the ...

Before I get into anything too messy, I'd like to say Welcome to YWS! I haven't seen you around here before! First I would like to guide you to my ...

I liked the repetition of the first part. otherwise, I didn't get it, couldn't relate, found no pattern, and just didn't like it XD To be honest! Of course. I ...

It's not all that bad for a first poem. My biggest complaint is the punctuation for now :-D But I'm proud of you! You actually have punctuation! *hugs poem* You ...

First off, I don't think I've critiqued anything by you, or ever generally said welcome to you. Welcome to YWS! I'm Claudette! Instructor-soon-to-be-Jr. Mod! :-D Now then, the critique. Punctuation. ...

“I’m not really sure what I saw.” Kyle clicked, and the figures on the screen started jumping and twirling again. Ack. This is like a really bad situation here. Thats ...