Emerson

Where is this big bang to answer questions you were talking about? The table had an insignia in the center: the simple schematic of a lung used in medical classes ...

I just have one thing: Sarah guesses she is above the ocean, but without anything to make sense of this, why should she guess they are above the ocean? And ...

She began to more seriously struggle for air beneath him, writhing under his hands 'more seriously' sounds so odd to read... She turned to him and cocked her head, laughed ...

The poem seems to contradict it self. Before your poison arrows struck me down, Spiraling into my love for you. Now I'm drowning in your endless sea of pain. Lost ...

Both ideas ahead of me were spot on. I think if you plan to rewrite it you should add more. Give us more, will you? Honestly this only made sense ...

I remember reading this! Perhaps you posted this on WF? I believe this was for the WB famous first line contest? "Mother died today." L'Etranger by Albert Camus. I have ...

Was...cute I suppose, though somewhat odd! And a teeny, tiny little girl From reading it, I don't think "Teeny, tiny" should be how you describe her. She calls Lucy a ...

Well first off, this was a filler chapter, wasn't it? Wasn't all that exciting, since no one cares about Sarah. But hey it's CH I don't care. Other than that ...

Even you mentioned Romeo and Juliet. I'm curious: you said it was for your English class, were you supposed to write a poem relating to Romeo and Juliet? Because the ...

I'm such a proof reader! I feel so misused... Why he chose to spoke to you is a surprise to us all.” to speak. *claps* So, yeah, it was worth ...

Had Kyle even loved Jonathon? Eh. Can I say cut this out? I realize you are following Jon's narrative but I don't think it feels very Ch. Maybe I'm wrong. ...

He doesn't l—need me." Er. What? "Good boy," purred Kyle, swiping his tongue over the curve of Michael's ear and leaning back. Micheal? Mind explaining? Dean caught it and grabbed ...

Iron horses race down florescent tunnels, you sit, diverting your eyes to watch the flicker of harnessed electricity spark into an intangible streak, and here I think you need to ...

I'll repeat: This is interesting. I'll make my own opinion: It was a list, and so, made for a very boring poem. I agree, write it from your POV. How ...

I liked it. Really, for once I've found something I enjoyed! Particularly that it had a story though at some points it was a little confusing. I also really liked ...