Emerson

Oy, Imp dear. You blow me away with everything you do. I could visualize the church... marvelous. I love Gregorian chants as well, so " sanctus, sanctus spills" worked wonders. ...

Kitty caught the typos... You seriously need to punctuate, btw. Poetry & Punctuation . Reminded me a lot of the song Hell is for Children . Doesn't really make for ...

Rating changed to R for content and language... I placed my cold yet clammy hand on my forehead. cold yet clammy doesn't work. Clammy is cold... “Fuck! You look white!” ...

I like the imagery... I haven't really read over what everyone else has said. (I see some stanza killing went on?) The imagery is really nice, the only problem I ...

Not too bad. I should be rejoicing with her though, shouldn't I? Eleven, aren't there twelve...? The ending was slightly melodramatic. "Yay! but....no... it's still sad. because, it is." But ...

It's good. But the feelings are played low. Amber a few chapters ago totally ditched her friend, and now at the "reunion" it's kind of light. Otherwise, it was good ...

Just leaving her behind like that was the hardest thing I’ve ever had to do. It was, really? Because when I read it, it looked pretty easy... Up the emotions, ...

I read 32still first, this makes more sense. I hate being confused Oo But this chapter was good, and I'll tell you exactly why: you asked tammy a question, and ...

You know [from what I saw, lol] you have two 32 chapters? But seeing as I'm reading everything out of order anyway I'm just ignoring how it makes sense and ...

To one side of the tall, raised desk stood a police officer a bailiff. Not a police officer. Every time he got divorced... If [from what I have read] Jamie's ...

In entire agreement with Whence. It lacked emotions/I felt nothing. Poems about emotions suck, because you have to be really good to write a really good poem about them... The ...

Okay... 1) if she just asks Tammy to come back [we don't know why she fired her in the first place, and why she brought her back. We lost both ...

hmm... Making court scenes readably enjoyable is almost impossible. I just finish Dostoevsky's amazing novel, The Brothers Karamazov which I highly suggest you read before you die. They had a ...

People I don't know, some caring, some hoping to see another murdering teen go to jail. Not a complete sentence. vowing to to cry. not to cry? I have to ...

the sun had now set, but looking at Tammy's face you wouldn't know. . Well,yes, because you can't see the sun being gone in Tammy's face...? This didn't make much ...