Philosophy of the Dark
Chapter 30:4
-The Verdict
The room was abnormally silent. Even the typewriter made no noise.
Amber was in her usual seat behind Jamie and Tammy. Across the room
Ortega was saying something quietly to Mary.
The jury came from a door on the side of the room in a straight line, slowly
making their way toward the jury box.
“Couldn’t they walk faster?” Jamie leaned over to ask Tammy.
Be patient.”
Finally they were seated. All eyes were on them, and finally Judge Vogel spoke.
“Has the jury come to a decision?”
man stood up, he was Juror One.
“We have.”
“Eleven of you have agreed on your verdict.”
“Yes,” the man nodded.
“For Jamie Dumont, on the count of grievous bodily harm, what is your
verdict?”
Juror one paused, Jamie watched him looking around the room. Jamie
didn’t dare to breathe, she just had one thought, repeating itself in her
mind. Taunting her, torturing her.
Guilty. Guilty. Guilty.
Juror one breathed in, preparing himself to speak. Jamie froze, the tension
in the room was tangible.
“Not guilty.”
All of the air held in Jamie’s lungs escaped in one long sigh. Amber might
have squealed, but she didn’t care. She was free. She was going to be okay.
Tammy was smiling hugely, watching the room rejoice, even Judge Vogel
had a hint of smile on her face.
Jamie cast a glace to the other table. Ortega’s hands were in tight fists, his
knuckles had turned white. Jamie’s mom had a phantom smile on her face,
but her eyes were dead and crying. The doctor and the nurse were there,
the nurse smiled at Jamie. The doctor looked like he didn’t care at all.
“Jamie!” Amber exclaimed, “You’re not guilty! Everything’s going to be
alright!”
Jamie turned and smiled at Amber, but the smile never reached her eyes.
Amber was overflowing with joy, Tammy looked the part of a proud,
successful lawyer. Jamie was free, but she didn’t feel free. Something was
still missing, something wasn’t right.
Somehow she knew that the fight wasn’t over just yet. Fairytale endings
weren’t made for her.
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Chapter order:
34squared
30:4
35
(back to normal-ish)
hehe, yay! Finally the verdict, hehe =D
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POD 35 -Never Existed -On Both Accounts
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I swear I had reviwed this!!!!!!!!! I must have just read it and make comments in my mind....
Anywho!
Very very very happy that she got off! now just need to know whats going to happen with her dad!
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Not too bad.
I should be rejoicing with her though, shouldn't I?
Eleven, aren't there twelve...?
The ending was slightly melodramatic. "Yay! but....no... it's still sad. because, it is."
But I'm sure in the next drafts, you'll clean all this stuff out. First drafts are always the worst.
My heart was pounding when I read that...I swear one of these days your writings going to cause me some sort of heart attack from suspense.
Anyways, fab stuff! The mistakes I noticed are the same as ShadowTwits so I won't bother pointing them out again.
Can't wait for more and to see what happens with her Dad....
Alainna
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hehe, thanks Shadow! Honestly I'm kinda relived that the chapters will be somewhat normal now too! hehe.
Once again, thanks for reading!
-JC
Oh MAN, they got her off!!! Yahzoo! And foreshadowing..... dun-dun-dun-dun-dun....
In a way, I think that's right. What Jamie's been through can't be resolved by a simple "not guilty".
Missing opening quote marks.
Comma after "finally"?
Nix the repetition of "finally". You could leave the first, and simply take out the second.
"A" man?
Semi-colon instead of comma? Or you could rewrite the sentance and get those two facts together. Perhaps, "The first Juror stood up"? Whatever you think best. :)
Phew, the chapter order is becoming clear once more.
-Twit