Elijah

Some sentences could be formed in a different way from the one you had written them in so they could catch the eye more and just go more naturally with ...

The thought and the whole thing that you want to show to the readers was kind of unclear at the very beggining so the reader need to stay and read ...

What Happened to Me? The tittle is pretty appealing and making the readers stop and take a really adds the mystery you need in your writing but only if you ...

I need to sing some parts faster than other parts which made it weird and odd while i was singing so.XD Overall,amazing song for when someone is in love.Personally you ...

Pretty poem.The punctuation is pretty out but this does not effect the feeling it expresses atleast in my opinion.The capital letters missing either. It is not cliche and well put.A ...

Short and simple showing exactly what it means.This is amazing. This is what i think and you should go on writing in this style.The poetry is short but still full ...

I really can not say negative things about this piece of art.Unfortunatly that is will not be finished. I think you have a very good style of writing your stories ...

I like the feelings of this short poetry! It exactly expresses what a siren is doing with her preys.I think you did a very good job here. The start was ...

I like it.Some parts just do not suit the whole thing conclusion it is very good and it looks like you really had tried to put your emotions and feelings ...

On one place I could see the punctuation on others-no.I do not know If I was the only one actually seeing this as something that maybe needs to be correct.I ...

It is short unfortunatly.I think you are heading great with your story.The plot is catches the eye and the whole situation is interesting.If it could be atleast a bit longer ...

"...The voices...their the static" I found only this to be needs to be they are or they're instead of their if I understood right.Without that,the plot is horribl--y amazing! X/D ...

In one place you start with a capital letter on others-you do not. That poem shows your feelings and what you feel when you are in such a makes us,the ...

Amazing amazing!I loved the first part and I just fell in love with this second part also! You could tear apart one or two long sentences but it is still ...

The story is amazing and it is even more amazing how no person had seen and read it yet!Anyways,I am here for that? XD Good choice to put the 16+ ...