The Siren.

Hello! This is my first review so it might be a little bad.
I really liked the eerie feeling it gave me when I read it. The start is amazing, very captivating. It pulls the reader in right away by saying; t"he carcass of my last victim still warm."
It describes what the siren is doing with her pray which I find very intriguing. I also really like (well I like the whole thing a lot!) the part where you talk about "someone foolish and young." As I all ready said I love the whole thing! Can't wait to read more of you from you!!

I like the feelings of this short poetry!
It exactly expresses what a siren is doing with her preys.I think you did a very good job here.
The start was the most amazing part atleats for me which made me stay.
The last lines were kind of off atleast for me.But this is only my opinion.
Maybe the 'I will' repeatment made me think this way towards the end.
But overall it is amazing piece of art!

Hi Hereitstarts, I hope you are having a good day and here's my review. I liked the idea behind it being of course a siren, but I feel at times that the poem could have elaborated in different ways. Maybe it's just me but in lines 9 and 11 you started both of them with the word take, and I feel that you could have used a different word in that circumstance to truly illustrate the siren. Also I don't know what squack means, so if you could define that for me that would be greatly appreciated. Finally, overall I really like the poem especially lines 1&2 as they start off strong. I can't wait to read more works from you!

Hi! I'm Doc, nice to meet you

I liked the darkness of this piece, I've always had a particular interest in mermaids and sirens.
Someone very close to me is a sailor and I grew up reading a lot of fairy tales so always thought these creatures of the sea were very spooky.

In your first line, the word carcass is misspelled. I also think the punctuation is a little off - it disrupts the flow of the piece. I would say:

The carcass of my last victim - still warm,
my screech is loud and clear.

I love the lines:

"I wait as silent and still as the night,

waiting for someone foolish and young,

someone full of hope for the world to come."

Great use of rhyme there and adds a tone of ambiance - setting the reader up for fright.

I didn't like the use of the word "squack" - reminded me too much of ducks to be quite honest...
I understand what you're trying to convey; the sound of this mystical creature. Maybe use an onomatopoeia instead? Just a suggestion.

Again, I love the imagery of "suckling the soul"... very terrifying and powerful.

You start the poem on a such a strong note but the ending feels more life a story than a poem. I would separate it into lines instead of making it one big run on.

There's some awesome potential here - I like it!

- The Doc