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Re: Finding Destiny (Chapter 5)
It was mesmerizing to look at. In a previous chapter you spelt mesmerising wrong. XD It must've been just a typo. Just then I noticed on his right arm, right ...
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Re: Finding Destiny (Chapter 4)
Ooo! I like it how you've changed the points of view! It'll be interesting to read from Cole's perspective. So here goes, once again I'll mostly just tell you about ...
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Re: Finding Destiny (Chapter 3)
Hello, I'm back! All I know is that I needed to see him again. Your tenses are conflicting again. You can make it all I knew is that I needed ...
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Re: Finding Destiny (Chapter 2)
Heeeeeey, I'm back again! :D He has jet black hair and you could see his muscles outlining underneath his shirt. Your tenses are conflicting here. He has jet black hair ...
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Re: Finding Destiny
Hey! I'm going to review some of your story for Review Day. :) I fall into unconsciencesness again. It's spelt like this: unconsciousness. "Baby, look, I know it's good and ...
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Re: *Untitled* First Chapter
Heya! I'm here to review. I'll type the original sentence and then any corrections under it. :) Each reflecting off eachother in the morning sunlight, It was 8 o'clock in ...
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Re: My Sister Lauren (Chapter 1)
Hey!! As I read the first paragraph I noticed that it was really quite large. It's much easier to read a story if the paragraphs are smaller. I didn't find ...
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Re: TFoA - Chapter 13
Hello and Happy Review Day! I know I've read a few of your chapters, but not enough to review character development and what not. So please don't get annoyed when ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Going through Time-Chapter Thirteen: Escaping Tartarus with a Hellhound and a Titan
"Hello, Jasmine. Long time, no see." Yes... hello, Kronos. :D I'm here as requested! Happy Review Day, earthbender! So he was imprisoned in Tartarus. Starting the sentence with 'so' doesn't ...
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Re: Early Mother's Day
Hello fellow earthbender! This poem is so sweet, your mum must be touched. :) This poem's to my mother; It's about how I love her so. You could do without ...
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Re: Heaven (Part 2)
Hello and Happy Review Day! I like this part of your story just because it reminds me a lot of the recent Doctor Who episodes? Have you seen them? If ...
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Re: ​Growing acceptance of web media
Hello and Happy Review Day! I thought it would be helpful for you if I said what points really stood out for me. That way you can decide if you ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Down the Rabbit Hole (Chapter 2: Purpose)
Hello and Happy Review Day!! I don't believe I've read the first chapter so I'm just going to look for nitpicks in here... The sun beat down on my body, ...
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Re: III:The Revelation
Heya, I'm back to review part three. By the way, Happy Review Day!! :) Wow. Just wow. I really hadn't expected that at all! I think it was a really ...
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Re: Lullaby of the Sea
I loooooooove this! Really I do, I've always been fascinated by mythical creatures and its great when people write stories about them. You actually gave me a whole new idea ...
Nov 30, 2014