Dhendon

Wow, another excellent chapter. This still left me with a ton of questions, just like the last chapter. Although you answered my previous question, now I am stuck wondering, much ...

Okay, let me start by saying this was pretty interesting. I like the concept of this story because its like she is having a boy like her so much when ...

First point, woah, wall of text. Paragraphs are good, otherwise readers will 1) never read it and 2) not be able to follow it. Second off, grammar, punctuation, and spelling ...

Perhaps this is my personal loss, but I did not find a real story within this piece. All I got as a story line from this was that there was ...

Okay, this is definitely an excellent idea and I am very interested. I like that you have this separated into two parts that involves both points of view in this ...

Okay, let me start off with the fact that I think the concept of this story has potential. It is mysterious and exciting, and I think that you can take ...

Wow, I can see this piece turning into a wonderful story. First off, let me say, that this was very strange, but in a good way. I have never seen ...

Okay, let me start by saying that I am heavily interested in this story. Starting the piece of with sudden action and unexpected events certainly keeps the reader anxious to ...

Let me start by saying that I have a personal love for fantasy writing, so this was right down my alley. Now, I like the way this is starting, it ...

This was lovely. I quite enjoyed this piece. I liked the meaning behind it and I thought it was wonderfully displayed. Overall, an excellent piece. I loved the word choice ...

This is a very interesting piece and certainly easy for people to relate to. People are always faced with this problem, and most kids will look at another person's paper ...

This was excellent, and I liked the concept portrayed in this. My first thing that I would suggest as a correction or edit would be to add an extra space ...

Oh wow, that was powerful. At first, I was not quite sure what we were talking about in this piece, but once I got past the first few lines, I ...

Wow. Let me start off with my first impression and opinion of this. I was a little bored from the start. It seemed like a stereotypical "I love you but ...

Okay, neat. Let me start with the obvious, there is a spelling mistake of thron instead of thorn in the eighth line. Now, moving on. I could not quite figure ...