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Hi Fatithhope, I really liked this poem. It had really good flow - would probably make a great song. I could anticipate the next line (in a good way). I ...

Hi Lonely, It's amazing how much you can do with so little space. This poem was amazing. It had really good rhythm. There was no part where the flow stopped. ...

Hi Cristata, I love this poem. You did a good job of setting up the mood - very creepy. I also thought the poem had good flow and rhyme scheme. ...

I liked the experimental format of this poem - really contributed to the flow of the piece. What inspired you to write with this spacing and punctuation? I also liked ...

This piece was entertaining and has a lot of potential. I especially like how it begins, and the description of the island: "Out here a thin layer of sand-like dust ...

I'll start with a quick nitpick - the word "somehow" (line three) is one word. Also, in this line, I think you meant "our" rather than "out". "Tell me what ...

I really like this poem. It reminds me of a musician friend I have. Good writing with great flow. It felt like this could be lyrics to a song, felt ...

I can relate this to my grandfather's memorial. He was drafted and when he left the military, he was disabled and suffered psychological scarring. He was never quite the same ...

This is really good - wonderful word choices! I also like the rhyme scheme. It had a great flow, juxtaposing lively descriptions with their mundane meanings. I also like the ...

I like this a lot. Salvador Dali is one of my favorite artists, and this is my favorite painting that he has done. Your interpretation of this work was amazing, ...

Great writing and choice of words. I really liked the flow of the piece. I thought this line was particularly beautiful: "you let them dry off your face, like slowly-melting ...

Interesting story with great description! I could really imagine the character after this bit: "She was beautiful with smooth brown skin like chocolate, hair as brown as honey and a ...

I thought it was very good and if you wrote a longer story, I would definitely read it. I thought the story was very suspenseful. I was wondering if this ...

Good writing. I'm wondering if there will be a follow-up chapter to this piece. I was definitely not expecting that ending, but the piece was entertaining. I was curious to ...

I see a lot of potential in this piece. I had a hard time emotionally connecting with it, not sure why. There was a lot of build up, and the ...