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Hey, This is a really interesting poem. First off nice job with punctuation. As for little nitpicks, in your line "You stare, when I ain't looking" I feel like ain't ...

Hey, This is an amazing poem. You've done a reallynice job capturing this whole perfect image about the perfect girl. But you also showed its darker side and the strain ...

Hey, I get where your going here...I think. I'm a little confused as to how exactly this is a poem tho. It doesn't meet my criteria for a poem. Looking ...

Hey, This is a really interesting poem. I love that you took the time to use proper punctuation. Thank you so much for that. I loved the words you choose ...

Hey, So right of the bat I can see this is a really short poem. I feel like you just kinda threw words onto the page however. You used no ...

Hey, This is a interesting short poem to say the very least. I see a few errors however, for example "the memories Of lost" of does not need to be ...

Hey, This is a really great poem for not being very long it has a lot of depth. The translation went over very smoothly, so nice job there. The use ...

Hey, I admit when I saw you said two stories I was mildly frightened... so I have to agree with the others for being a short story this is awfully ...

Hey, I'd like to start by saying I love the use of the picture at the end. It was a nice change from the usual ending and the fact that ...

Hey, I like this poem. I Wish it was longer however I really enjoyed reading this. I find that I can really relate to it to and that's important for ...

Hey, Amazing poem! However I'm not entirely sure how the last part fits in I might just not be comprehending something however. Also how exactly did you go from guitar ...

Hey, This poem is great. I have to admit at first I was a little confused by the capitalization. At this point however I think I understand, but I'm not ...

Hey, I wanna start by saying you don't have to point out the typo at the bottom you can just go in and fix it. Otherwise this is a great ...

Hey, This has the potential to become a great poem. Its a little rough right now however. I feel like this poem reads a bit like a choppy ocean its ...

Hey, This is a interesting poem. It was written very well so good job there. Thank you so much for using punctuation! A lot of poets don't feel the need ...