Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language, violence, and mature content.
IT'S TIME FOR EXPIATION!
HEAR THE SCREAMS ACROSS THE NATION!
TIME FOR THE WORLDS END,
ALL EARS ATTENTION MUST ATTEND!
Hearts beat faster than the bullets of the gun,
Death is the ultimate form of ordained fun,
Allowing sins to go without reprimand,
This is the call all nations command,
As humanities screams and laughter go hand in hand!
HEAR THE TOLLING OF THE BELL!
YES HUMANITY WE'RE GOING TO HELL!
LISTEN TO THE PLEADING ACROSS CREATION!
DEATH IS UNDOUBTEDLY THE ULTIMATE RECREATION!
Hear the calls of an unending war,
And the knocking of conscription upon your door,
Better sign up as quick as you can,
For those who couldn't have already ran.
SING YOUR HEART OUT FOR THE WORLD YOU CRAVE,
SIGN THE SCRIPTURES FOR THE STRENGTH TO SAVE,
THE WORLD'S END IS EXPONENTIALLY HIGH,
AND THE FALLING OF HUMANITY IS NIGH!
Prepare to save your souls from those below,
Though many say it is a fruitless effort of show,
Fight your heart out for your Savior's of light,
And let the summons of conscription slip unto dark night!
SWING THE BLADES OF FURY'S BLIGHT,
BLACKENED BY THE FEAR OF UNENDING NIGHT,
THE UNCLAIMED HOURS ARE AT HAND,
DRAW THE WEAPONS WE COMMAND,
FALLING STRENGTH ENDS WITH THE WEAK,
LIVE UPON THE DEAD OF WHOSE SOULS REEK,
AND HAVOC SHALL FALL ACROSS THE LAND,
FOR HUMANITIES UNHOLY REPRIMAND!
Demons call from the darkness below,
And angels feathered wings are all roan,
The pale amenity of necessities well known,
Falls beneath the perilous blade blade well honed.
CUT DEEP INTO THE LIFE YOU LOVE,
AS ANOTHER LIFE FALLS INTO THE GROVE,
OF PAIN AND ABSOLUTE MISERY TO WHICH THE WORLD ADHERES,
AND AS THE DECEASED CRY OUT THEY SHED NO TEARS!
Listen to the wisps of the decaying willow,
An encompassing night it's only pillow,
Light shine down upon the the dying earth,
As the existence of humanity shatters the hearth.
RAGE OF THE COSMOS, HATE OF THE UNIVERSE,
REMOVE THIS FROM HUMANITY LEST BE REIMBURSED,
OF THE BEAUTY AND JOY CREATED BY THE GALAXY,
HUMANE PROSPECTS HAD NO CHANCE AND WERE SET FREE!
The worlds light is a dwindling thing, and it shines brightly in the midst of crisis,
The darkness encroaches upon reality like the cultivations of Isis,
As foretold, realities end shall put us to the test,
And thus the name of humanity shall perish like the rest.
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IT'S TIME FOR EXPIATION!
HEAR THE SCREAMS ACROSS THE NATION!
TIME FOR THE WORLDS END,
ALL EARS ATTENTION MUST ATTEND!
I really like this opening part. It gets the reader's attention (as the last line said) and feels sort of whymsical.
Hear the calls of an unending war,
And the knocking of conscription upon your door,
Better sign up as quick as you can,
For those who couldn't have already ran.
Could you just tell me in a comment what's happening here? I'm a little confused. I know that people get conscripted in wars, but it seems like this conscription has something to do with the end of the world.
The worlds light is a dwindling thing, and it shines brightly in the midst of crisis,
The world's light. You just need that extra punctuation.
It's a cool poem, if not extremely dark. I read it fast paced with my inner voice shouting it. I'd give you 8/10 for this.
Hey,
This poem is great. I have to admit at first I was a little confused by the capitalization. At this point however I think I understand, but I'm not sure it fits... I can see a few punctuation errors as well "and it shines brightly in the midst of a crisis, The darkness" The darkness should not be capitalized as you used a comma in the line above... Now that I look that seems to be the one big mistake you just made it several times. However I think this is a amazing poem and I enjoyed reading it. I hope to get to read more of your work in the future. My last bit of advise would have to be try not to use so many commas. Part of what makes a great poem different from a normal poem is how the poet uses punctuation.
Sincerely,
Collideascope
Thanks for the advice. I'll fix up the mistakes if I get time. The main reason that the capitals appear is because that I write my stories up on word before I post them, and the capitals just appear every new paragraph.
I'm glad you liked reading my poem, and I hope you have a nice day.
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In just one word, STRONG!

this writing is worth reading.
I love reading this kinda strong writing containing a message. Even my most writings are like this.
you have got a wonderful point of view which is perhaps rare.
i wish you'd become one of the strongest writer in future. May the almighty bless you dear.
I loved your this creation by only reading it's first some lines.
So, best of luck. Good time.
Aww, thank you. It's a very nice compliment to get from anyone. I'll train my writing skills to become the best writer I can be.
I hope you have a nice day! ^_^