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Yep, like Jack said. Everyone has their own styles. I don't think there's anything that can be done to it, really.

For some reason I was able to predict what was going to happen next the entire poem. Weird... Anyway, it was pretty darn sad if you asked me even though ...

Omyoghs... *Omygosh. That was...weird. I couldn't really keep up--nor did I get. Like Jack said, you try and work on making it have more sense to it.

Why can't I have Adobe? *sniff*

So sad... I like it though. I love the second stanza and where you made the smoke be Edgar's pulse. Lol thanks. When I wrote that line, I actually think ...

What you said's not rude. It's true...it's very repetitive and not very clear. But I love doing that. I don't ever plan on doing anything with this song. But it's ...

We share sympathies? Huh?

I'm assuming chortle is bad...and I'm deleting the last line.

hm...who is this Nick... *goes to brads blog*

Sorry, Brad. I'm having a hard time concentrating on the poem. I'm too busy being nosy. *Looks around*

A little choppy but the subject is good. Perhaps you should ditch the periods. And as for the title, "Ending" is nice.

The Used, The Mars Volta, Fall Out Boy, The Early November, and The Juliana Theory. Those bands rock. Especially the last three...I don't like The Used much.

Thank you so much! is depressing. For some reason I was going for that. *shrugs*

Oh wow! That was so pretty. I'm sorry but I can't come up with any constructive critiquing besides...well done!

Well, as I often do, I did not understand the poem...like, at all. I read it twice but I still didn't get it. However, it was a painfully great poem. ...