for Nick, 'Tendrils of Gaze' (needs work...)

You are so very fragile that I feel forced
to suffocate you in bubblewrap and enclose you
in a cardboard box (this side up) and send
you (my poetry) through UPS, addressed to me.

tsk tsk tsk :P naughty little you
poor mail man

nice work you sack of brad

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Chevy
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hm...who is this Nick...

*goes to brads blog*

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emotion_less
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Eh... It was kind of sappy... I know, I shouldn't be one to talk about sappiness... Lovely, I guess I can say, yet it made me laugh throughout... but it's not bad or short.

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Sam
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The last stanza made me laugh...marshmallow...hehe. Maybe something like 'wax'? I'm not sure. The marshmallow makes it sound très stupid.

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Incandescence
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Yes, I am.

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Elizabeth
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not too short, not too sympathetic and not bad.
And I saw his pic.

happy now?

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Incandescence
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Is this too short, too sympathetic, or just bad all around? I can't decide.
Nick's picture is on my blog.



If I'm going to burn, it might as well be bright.
— Frank Zhang