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Well, I was having trouble concentrating in the beginning. My attention wasn't really grasped until: I don’t think so; you were dreaming a parasitic twin or some kind of semi-conscious ...

Well, perhaps you should add a little more. I really liked the concept--I have to give you that--that was really good. However, you just seemed to jump from subject to ...

Life-seems like Somewhere to be without being Not really a good beginning...seriously set the stage for a really lame poem. It kind of sounded like the beginning to a dialogue ...

Em is especially melancholy,lol. I play, so I know what you mean. I played the two chords and tried to sing the it slow or fast? I liked it the ...

Words of fire Hide what I really Want to say Sort of an awkward beginning...I don't really understand what you mean, and in songs, you have to make sure you ...

Yes. The "Children Of..." line is weird. Trusting onlhy in this God, I'm sure you meant "only." Just a careless mistake, but I really liked this line. However, I agree ...

Well, the idea of the poem itself was interesting. It was definitely one that kept me reading. However, somethings about it were annoying: 1. The use of "Cuz," I personally ...

Well, it was rather lengthy and I think it would have been better in the Narrative Poetry section. Anyway, I really liked it, but there was one thing--you didn't use ...

What does tomorrow hold? Should be taken out completely. I read it without it, and it sounded so much better. Nights have flied Galatea is right..."flied" is no word. It ...

How subtle the stench of broken dreams :Chokes: I was forced to think of the ever-so popular Boulevard of Broken Dreams. But other than that, I really liked it...I don't ...

Well, I had a difficult time understanding and keeping up--there seemed to be so many subjects and so much meaning in just these few short lines. Not to say I ...

Well, I guess I can say I liked it...I didn't too much care for the beginning and all the questions seemed to make it a little rendundant. And this stanza: ...

But I am with he. Should probably be changed to: Fore I am with he. Anyway, I didn't think at first that I would like this at all, especially because ...

I agree with Bobo...I'm having a hard time figuring it out myself. everything--he says is a block and a strike everything? arm in arm--block lips to lips--strike and a sweet ...

your scent drives me crazy. Hm, I liked the concept here, however, I think it should be worded differently. "Scent" is a very strange use for describing a person, I ...