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The Blind Man's Eyes (not the best title...but it works)

by Tara


I wrote this when I was 13, and just found it again. ~*blows away dust*~


Down on the streets of old Montgomery,
where old memories go when they die,
Lives an old man named Thomas Gray,
he's got no home and he's lost his eyes.

He lives off Corona and Wonderbread,
And memories of better days.
(you know) it's a wonder he aint dead
but he keeps on livin' anyway

Cause he's got light, of his own,
He's got sunshine, long after the sun has gone,
you know he says he sees bluebirds, long after the bluebirds have flown.
He may be blind, but in his mind, he's got light o his own.

"She said she was goin out to get some air,
she never told me she was goin away,"
He's got a million of these stories,
This is the one he's tellin today.

He's a king in beggar's clothing,
He's a wise man dressed as a fool
I swear I've learned more from that man,
than thy can teach you in school.

Cause he's got light, of his own,
He's got sunshine,
long after the sun has gone,
you know he says he sees bluebirds,
long after the bluebirds have flown.
He may be blind, but in his mind, he's got light o his own.

(A bunch of do's da's and doootin doo doo's ....aren't I descriptive? :roll: )

He may be blind but in his mind.................................
he's got light of his own.


The lyrics need ALOT of work, but I like the tune . :wink:


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Tara says...



Thanx, I'll try that. it had D in it in some places. It plays slow.

I love this site! people always have suggestions! :D




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Em is especially melancholy,lol. I play, so I know what you mean. I played the two chords and tried to sing the song...is it slow or fast? I liked it the way I played it--which was slow, and mostly three counts each note. Anyway, I wrote with this tune. Except, I added C major in there--it sounded really good--I tried it with this too (Em, Am, C) and it sounded good...perhaps you should try that.




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This song is nothing without the tune. You have to hear it to understand how it goes. The chords are basically A minor and E minor, which, if you play the guitar, you will know are very melancholy

Yeah, I can say I would change the lyrics...but I probably never will. I write a song, then forget it. Then I write another, and forget it as well :wink:




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Firestarter says...



Very weird lol!

I think I agree, the lyrics need work, even though the pace is good.

I think you should make it less like a story, cos it makes it feel less like a song at the moment and more like a poem/story cross over.





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