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Here for the review, as promised. This is indeed very good, as Calla said. Your grammar is excellent, the ending is great, and you introduce the characters very well. I ...

I'm here, but I see this was unnecessary. I do believe you need no reviews. This is excellent, excellent indeed. I love your writing style, and your grammar is very ...

Double I, here to review. First thought as I read this: WHAAT? Did you just kill - ? My god, that was cruel. ;) I kid, of course, as it's ...

Double I for the review, as promised. As all your writing, this is very good indeed, however, there is, again a lamentable lack of description, but that can be added ...

Double I once again here for the review :) I agree with tgirly, this is a really interesting bit. However, once again I lament the fact that it might be ...

Double I here for the review, as promised. As I loved the prologue, I love this. Your writing style is really good, and I couldn't spot any grammatical imperfections. This ...

Hello, Double I here for the review! Well, let me start off by saying this is an excellent piece. You really state the events and intentions well without letting too ...

Greetings- though this was uncalled for, I hope it'll help. ;) Firstly, let me say you started off very well - the intro was very catchy, it brought you right ...

Greetings. As I have read your prologue, I am here to review the first chapter. And let me begin. Once again, I like your style, however... WHOA! Information overload. This ...

Greetings, I'm here, unasked but hopefully wanted, to review! I'll be very short. Firstly, I'll be eager to read more, the plot seems interesting. However, I can't really picture where ...

Greetings. I'm here, though not by invitation. What can I say? I like your wordplay, it flows very nicely. I also like how you described the scene, but a little ...

Greetings. This review was unasked for, but I'm here anyhow. :) First off, let me say that I find this very interesting. The ending was particularly catchy, though maybe, and ...

Okay, as my first attempt sunk, I'm back, again, with a new review. I agree with the reviews below me, it's very interesting, packs a lot of mystery, but it ...

Greetings. I'm here, as promised. Let me start by saying yours is an interesting story idea, and I'll be interested in reading more. I'ts good that the prologue kicks you ...

Firstly, since I'm slightly nit-picky about this, the font you used hurts my eyes :) (that's just me, nothing serious) Secondly, I spotted some mistakes 'agonising' should be spelled 'agonizing', ...