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What this looks like to me is a bunch of vague, abstract, and sometimes slightly emo phrases strung together. And...that's kind of what it is. But don't worry, Caitlin! I ...

I agree wholeheartedly with Clau here. Some of the lines you have are really, really nice, while others just kind of...struggle to be, and then aren't. Rhythm and rhyme. I ...

This poem is cute, and the rhythm and rhyme are decent, if simple. I'd like to see you apply those skills to something a little more original, though, a little ...

I'm not very good at cinquains either, probably because I haven't written one since I was about nine. This suggestion goes for all forms of poetry, not just your cinquains: ...

[spoiler]Well, in OotP, after he sees Snape's worst memory, Harry asks Remus and Sirius about it, wondering how his father could've been such a jerk and why in the world ...

Hey, something euclidean! I think it's been a while since you've posted; it's nice to see your work again. I really enjoyed this piece. I think you did a great ...

This poem doesn't strike me as something great because it's rambly, vague, and poorly punctuated. It seems like a stream of consciousness, just something that slipped out and wasn't edited. ...

This sounds to me like a billion other poems I've read before; it doesn't seem to go any deeper than some surface cliches and worn-out words and images. Your title ...

I like it! It's easy to understand on a surface level, but you've created some ambiguities that make it more sophisticated. The imagery struck me as one of its best ...

Okay I'm pissed. I was just writing a review of this and I was almost done and all of a sudden Internet Explorer jetted me off to the home page. ...

I agree with you in that a piece should be judged by its merit and not its subject matter, but I don't think this was well done. There's a difference ...

Remember: in whatever you write, you must put a teaspoon of humanity, otherwise, it will not cause the effect you want. *nods vigorously* I most definitely agree with Clau and ...

[Claudette] 10:46 pm: =/ Colly, it wasn't a haiku *bites* Well, it has 17 syllables, unless I'm counting badly because I'm running on about five hours of sleep. Although...modern haiku ...

I agree. Something more solid would be nice; a specific instance, a place... I did actually understand this poem, and I really liked what you were trying to express, but ...

A well written extended metaphor. Simple and effective, but too short to be anything but good. Everything Gummy writes is a well-written extended metaphor. I like it. I like it ...