BlueShift

Heyy there. :) I take that this is one of your first poems? Well, I'm glad you're getting into it. I still have much to learn about poetry myself, but ...

Hi there :)! I understand where you were trying to get to with this piece. Here's the laundry basket--an old, dilapidated thing that's taken for granted in spite of the ...

Hey Jenthura! This is an interesting take on the idea of success and identity. I love the concept of "life-making", and how it's been made into a business in this ...

Hi Mr. Knightley! Hmm, this story seems to mirror much of that Nickelodeon cartoon, Catz or Katz or something. And I must say, the language you used here seems much ...

I love the imagery in this short piece! It achieves the mysterious, magical effect I'm sure you wanted this story to have. I also love how it appeared like the ...

Hi! First of all, I think you've got a very interesting plot here. The tribal setting for an event as mystical as a resurrection also seems perfect to me. However, ...

Hi Kara! :) This is a thoroughly interesting plot. Why, indeed, would such a smart and handsome boy need to pretend he's blind when everything can be at his disposal ...

Hi! :) My first comment would be about your descriptions. There is a lot of detail about the surroundings, but they don't strongly create an atmosphere proper for the story. ...

This is such an original, well-written story :). It was engaging all throughout. Descriptions are good, and your two characters are well-defined. You've made the topic of love very complex, ...

This is a great theme for a short piece: the timeless conflict between the creatures of nature and the indifferent, destructive humans. It's a topic that can be explored in ...

Ah, the others have pointed out all of the little things in grammar and style that need to be edited :). But disregarding those, what you wrote here is a ...

My favorite fantasy trilogy is The Abhorsen Trilogy by Garth Nix :). It's EXTREMELY well-written. I also love the first installment of the Bartimaeus Trilogy, called The Amulet of Samarkand ...

Hello! :) This is certainly the most original poem I've read in a while; the theme is indeed very amusing :D. The technicalities of your poem can be improved, though. ...