Asith

Hello! Welcome to the site; happy review month; happy review day; all that good stuff! Kudos for posting your writing. The first step to being a good writer is writing, ...

Hello! God, this is an interesting story. I love these morbid types of short stories, so perhaps I'm biased in your favour, but I really did enjoy it. I'll try ...

Hello! Welcome to the site, and great job on deciding to write and show people your work; it's going to be so much fun! I'd like to say that is ...

Ooh, interesting story! It's always great to see unique pieces in the green room! Your writing itself is remarkably sound :) It's skilful; no amateur mistakes of punctuation, sentence structure, ...

Hi there! If you remember, I actually reviewed the old version of this piece too. That's why I wanted to write this; to give some advice on what changes I ...

Hello! I was putting off reviewing this chapter, because I feared that I was missing the entire point of this story, but it then occurred to me that that in ...

Hello! I'm surprised this hasn't been reviewed yet, it's a really interesting start to a story! You drew me in the from the beginning, and I must say that you ...

Hello! Firstly, I'd like to say that this is a really interesting short story, and I thoroughly enjoyed it! Theses types of short stories are my favorites to read, so ...

Woah, I've been reading through some stories that I've missed because they left the green room quickly, and I really wish I read this one sooner. Realistic short stories aren't ...

Some nice character work in this chapter! And I really like the hint at Zeke's past paired with the name mess-up from the previous chapter :) The one thing you ...

Hello! I'm going to try to bear in mind that this was just a small writing exercise for a class, but I'll leave my relatively light criticism here anyway :) ...

Hello! You've got two very lovely reviews already (seriously, they're great, take their advice to heart :p) but since it's Revmo and you have so much potential as a storyteller, ...

Hello! Welcome to the site! I have to say, this was an excellent chapter, and your work will definitely fit in well here. I like where the story is going, ...

Hello there! You've already got two reviews here, but since this is a piece that I feel could be great if treated with a good supply of improvement, I'm going ...

Hello, I'm here to review! I've read the first chapter too, even though I didn't leave a review on that (people had already said what I would've said). As for ...