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Re: The Quest for Fire - Frozen Past - Chapter Five
Hi! It’s AngelLily for a review! Happy review day! Okay, so I haven’t read the others chapters, but I really liked this one. The flow and dialog was pretty good. ...
Apr 26, 2020 -
Re: Emperor's Heir - Chapter 35
Hi! It’s AngelLily! Okay, so I haven’t read the other chapters, but I really liked the beginning of this chapter. It drew me in, and I liked the dialog. One ...
Apr 26, 2020 -
Re: I Don't Find Peace In The Rain
Hi! It’s AngelLily! Okay, so one of the first things I noticed was you didn’t indent, it’s not that big of a deal, but it helps. I loved the adjectives ...
Apr 25, 2020 -
Re: To All the Boys Who Never Texted Me Back: P.S. I Still Hate You
‘Sup! It’s AngelLily! Okay, I love the voice you used. You definitely made the character/you really unique. The story is very relatable and it’s good when you can relate to ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: I'm A Man Without Conviction
‘Sup! It’s AngelLily! Alright, I really loved the dialog. It was fun to read, and it made the character loveable. The dialog structure looks good for the most part, but ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: The LGBT+ community from a Christain's prespective.
‘Sup! It’s AngelLily! I just wanna say, PREACH! I am a Christian and I totally agree with you. I love how you used scriptures to backup your points. And I ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Lucem ac Tenebras, Chapter 2
What’s up! It’s AngelLily. Okay, so I like how you did the dialog for your characters. I’m like super obsessed with dialog, so this is good. But for your structure ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Seaside Roller Coaster
‘Sup, AngelLily here. Alright, this prom made me laugh, and it’s good when you can make your reader laugh, so good job. I love the rhyming words, they make it ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: This Hole You've Put Me In
‘Sup, AngelLily here Okay, so, I like how you rhymed. Also, I like how you made it relatable to the reader, I just love stuff like that. The flow of ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Lucem ac Tenebras, Chapter 1
Hi, AngelLily here, Okay, so the first few sentences really captivated me and lured me into the story. I like how you used some of the Latin, it gives your ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Confused
‘Sup, it’s AngelLily, Okay, so I like the rhyming you have it your song. It gives it good structure. The words all just flow together, and in my mind I ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Loud
Hey, it’s AngelLily, I really like the adjectives you used, it really got my brain turning with images. I can relate to this piece of literature, because I also find ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: In Which My 3 Fave Avengers Go Shopping: A Script
Ok, when I saw Avengers, I was like, yessss! Anyway, I like how you voiced the characters, you kept them actually in character, which not a lot of fanfics do. ...
Apr 24, 2020 -
Re: Lies and death
‘Sup! It’s AngelLily. I really like the flow of the story, and the beginning really lured me in. Right here: “Sometimes if this person makes you a compliment or help ...
Apr 23, 2020