Young Writers Society

hello there shaysphere! i’m harper and today i’m reviewing your song titled “Confusion”

may i just start by saying, i absolutely ADORE your user name! mine is not very deep or has any meaning what so ever, it just my name. so, i am going to say that i am a huge fan of listening to music. i don’t really stick to any single or particular genre. when i started reading your lyrics, i thought of it to the tune of “Can’t Stop Singing” from teen beach movie. why this song, i don’t know. probably the fact that it is stuck inside my lovely head. but, as i moved on it reminded me more of a slower song, probably closer to the rhythm of sun kissed by khaki dreams. these beautiful lyrics took me through so very many emotions. and may i say that this is the most relatable thing i’ve seen in a while.

moving on to the critique, i have to say i’m not a fan of how rhymy - rhymy this is. i couldn’t tell you why, but that is just how i feel. i realize that this is a song from your perspective, but i feel as if the word “I” is overused. those are the only things i’m disliking about this

i hope you find this review helpful, and i hope to see more of your lyrics in the future. keep on writing!!!

~harper

Arrow here!
I like the amount of rhyming you have in the song. I love how you perfectly describe the topic at hand here. The way the words just flow so smoothly together brings the entire song together. I can't express how much fun it is to imagine a beat with this song. Please, continue making things like this. I love this so much.
Keep it up!

With pawfuls of love,
xArrows

‘Sup, it’s AngelLily,
Okay, so I like the rhyming you have it your song. It gives it good structure. The words all just flow together, and in my mind I can put a beat to it which makes the reading more fun. The lyrics of the song can be very relatable to the reader, and I just really like this in general.
Keep up the good work.
Write on,
~AngelLily 😇

Jesse here to review, so I am hopping in.

I appreciate adding the title of chorus, so readers can understand.

I review your works because they're always so independent, which is a great thing.

Confusion is a exotic song idea. It makes for rare and exciting song with some real potential.

Thanks,
Jesse.