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[Verse 1]
What is this feeling?
My heart is reeling.
It's fast as a drum;
I'm hearing it come.
But, what's done is done.
[Pre-Chorus]
I'm caught by surprise.
I'm left to capsize.
I can't help thinking
That I went astray.
What happens next?
[Chorus]
'Cause I'm so confused.
Yeah, I'm so confused.
And I can't elude
From what just happened.
Even though I'm bruised,
You just cornered me;
Wouldn't be refused
'Cause I'm so confused.
[Verse 2]
Need time for healing.
My heart you're stealing,
Beating like a drum,
Ready to be done;
So now, here I come.
[Pre-Chorus]
I'm caught by surprise.
I'm left to capsize.
I can't help thinking
That I went astray.
What happens next?
[Chorus]
'Cause I'm so confused.
Yeah, I'm so confused.
And I can't elude
From what just happened.
Even though I'm bruised,
You just cornered me;
Wouldn't be refused
'Cause I'm so confused.
[Pre-Bridge]
What does this mean to you?
Am I just somebody
You'll treat like a tattoo?
We could be something new;
We could be something true.
Sadly, I don't want to ...
[Bridge]
I'll wear you like a tattoo.
I'll wash you out with shampoo.
And there's nothing you can do.
'Cause what happened was nothing;
I'll break it off like bamboo.
[Post-Bridge]
You tricked me with voodoo:
Thought this was something new;
Thought this was something true.
But this ain't a breakthrough.
I'll bid this damn fling adieu
Because I always knew,
There can't be me and you.
And I ain't confused.
[Chorus]
Yeah, I'm not confused.
Yeah, I ain't confused.
Now, I can elude
From what just happened.
So, don't think I'm bruised
You can't corner me
'Cause I will refuse.
'Cause I'm not confused.
Yeah, I'm not confused.
[Outro]
What is this feeling?
My heart is reeling.
It's fast as a drum;
I'm hearing come.
But, what's done is done.
And I'm not confused.
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hello there shaysphere! i’m harper and today i’m reviewing your song titled “Confusion”
may i just start by saying, i absolutely ADORE your user name! mine is not very deep or has any meaning what so ever, it just my name. so, i am going to say that i am a huge fan of listening to music. i don’t really stick to any single or particular genre. when i started reading your lyrics, i thought of it to the tune of “Can’t Stop Singing” from teen beach movie. why this song, i don’t know. probably the fact that it is stuck inside my lovely head. but, as i moved on it reminded me more of a slower song, probably closer to the rhythm of sun kissed by khaki dreams. these beautiful lyrics took me through so very many emotions. and may i say that this is the most relatable thing i’ve seen in a while.
moving on to the critique, i have to say i’m not a fan of how rhymy - rhymy this is. i couldn’t tell you why, but that is just how i feel. i realize that this is a song from your perspective, but i feel as if the word “I” is overused. those are the only things i’m disliking about this
i hope you find this review helpful, and i hope to see more of your lyrics in the future. keep on writing!!!
~harper
Arrow here!
I like the amount of rhyming you have in the song. I love how you perfectly describe the topic at hand here. The way the words just flow so smoothly together brings the entire song together. I can't express how much fun it is to imagine a beat with this song. Please, continue making things like this. I love this so much.
Keep it up!
With pawfuls of love,
xArrows
‘Sup, it’s AngelLily,
Okay, so I like the rhyming you have it your song. It gives it good structure. The words all just flow together, and in my mind I can put a beat to it which makes the reading more fun. The lyrics of the song can be very relatable to the reader, and I just really like this in general.
Keep up the good work.
Write on,
~AngelLily 😇
Jesse here to review, so I am hopping in.
I appreciate adding the title of chorus, so readers can understand.
I review your works because they're always so independent, which is a great thing.
Confusion is a exotic song idea. It makes for rare and exciting song with some real potential.
Thanks,
Jesse.