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Re: Battle of Marathon, Pt. 4
First of all, I haven't read the first three parts, but I was able to understand what was going on here, so that's a good thing. You have a great ...
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Re: Samson's Testimony
I was a bit worried that I was going to have to tell you that this isn't what the story of Sampson is about, but when I got to the ...
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Re: Obselete Absolution
Very interesting poem. I get a feeling of malice from it, dark, but definitely not ominous, very open. "Wants to love Called me a whore - Purple eyes pretty Cry ...
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Re: Forest Love
This poem is very nice, and I like that it ends on a sweet note. "A song I would sing, The rhythm beaten out by your feet, You swear you ...
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Re: I Want An Injection
This is a beautiful poem covering a somewhat dark experience. I love the lines, "To feel like I'm alive I really want to die Needing some normality Not accepting conformity" ...
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Re: Always Far
This is great work! Short, yes, but the words are strong enough to get their message across. All I can think of is "burn" on father who says he is ...
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Re: An Echo Of A Scream
This was good. The idea it puts into my head makes me stop and think for a minute about life. But there are some points that I didn't like so ...
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Re: When the darkness swoops over
I thought this was very beautiful. I will be honest, it's a little long and repeats itself a few times, but it's not a book, so I think that's all ...
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Re: Allusive Issues Adressed
Wow, this is very interesting, very in depth. I'm not even sure if I understand it, but you use a lot of great symbolism, as well as imagery that brings ...
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Re: Penguin at the Bottom
Lol, this almost seems childish, but that's probably the way you wanted it to be. I actually like the writing style and the feel it has, like your hurrying through ...
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Re: Too Good to Be True
I liked it. Don't think me weird or strange or creepish, but I think I liked it so much because I'm a lot like Luke. But I don't think that ...
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Re: Poor Fool
The idea that you bring to light here is very thought provoking. I love these two lines, "A jackal, perhaps, for I scavenge, A pit, perhaps, for I echo," They ...
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Re: Stars of ink
This was good. I liked your symbolism in the first stanza, "Worm trails in black Across a field of white Weaving an age-old tapestry Of lambent stars and sable ink" ...
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Re: Mirror
This is great! So real and true, but with enough eloquent language to make it's shortness worth every line. I really, really enjoyed it. "Sometimes the center that holds, wants ...
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Re: Are you Real?
I have to say, this was pretty good. Instantly I understood what you were talking about and the message that you were wanting to convey, which is always important in ...
Jan 18, 2014
