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Re: Autism Sensory Episode
I think this is amazing because you are capturing something that goes on inside your own head into words. That is something that is really difficult to do. You really ...
May 6, 2018 -
Re: NaPo #4: Late Night Sickness
I thought it was really good. I like the style of the poem, and how the main character wants the next day to get better. I think maybe work on ...
May 6, 2018 -
Re: To a Shadow
This piece intrigued me right from the beginning. However, I feel that there are some things I would do to improve this. You repeated two questions a bit at the ...
Feb 1, 2017 -
Re: the new year.
I really like it. There are several suggestions that I have about your poetry. Firstly, maybe in the second line "new, disastrous tropical storm." If you moved the words around ...
Jan 31, 2017 -
Re: Lucine ~ Prologue
Hey Heather! I love the work, it's great! There are several things I would touch up on. In the first paragraph, I believe the second sentence: "Mother and father were ...
Jan 30, 2017 -
Re: Of Desire and Honour
I think this is great! Keep up the good work. I think commas would be helpful throughout the poem to make it flow. Although, I am no poetry expert and ...
Jan 30, 2017 -
Re: Blow Raspberry
HolographicLadybug, Your play is very good. There are a few minor thing I would suggest changing. 1.) When you described the characters you described why they were important. It would ...
Dec 12, 2015 -
Re: The story of Carrie Moretz
@TimmyAlly, Your story was very impressive and you caught my attention right away! There are several typos and errors throughout the story. @WriterXAnonymous caught most of them, so that gives ...
Jul 6, 2015 -
Re: Shipwrecked
Hi @anniegirl123, You story is very intriguing and I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. The opening is very good and I was on the ...
Jul 6, 2015 -
Re: Basecode: Password Denied
@TheStormAroundMe, Wow, this is incredible! It is very descriptive and intriguing!I was slightly confused when Talon kept using patches, or painkillers. Obviously, they had hurt him in some way. Do ...
Jul 3, 2015 -
Re: I want that state of mind again...
@SINGHAM, This poem is very nice and runs really smoothly! I thought that it was very interesting and poetic. I love the first line "Times were hard, days were tough" ...
Jul 3, 2015 -
Re: My Final Walk, My Last Goodbye
@elitemaster030, I love the description and figurative language you used in this story! It made me very intrigued and interested in what was going on. In the beginning of the ...
Jul 3, 2015 -
Re: Regret But No Repentence
PassionateReader, I love the idea of basing the story off of a sentence. I liked the fact that your story was very descriptive and that you made everything very dramatic ...
Jul 1, 2015