I thought it was really good. I like the style of the poem, and how the main character wants the next day to get better.
I think maybe work on imagery because I want to be able to imagine the situation. I can understand what is going on but I have no idea where this is taking place, what sickness the person has, or how long they have been suffering. I can assume it is something like a cold or a cough from the cough drops and I can make the assumption that it is making them upset. This is good, but the poem is vague and could have more description for the reader to better understand what is going on.
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