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Some more five short stories-Clowns, magic, murder, and lies.

by vampricone6783


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.

*This is from my story “Clowns, magic, murder, and lies”. What happens in story #1 is the present, what happens in story #3 is from a chapter in my story “Clowns, magic, murder, and lies”, what happens in stories #2, #4, and #5 is from the past. Before the carnival, Philippa used to haunt her house. Now that it’s all cleared up, I want to say that Gacha Club character designs are on my wall and as always, enjoy!*

1. Calypso and clothes.

Calypso had always been one to notice clothes.

Especially if someone dressed in all black.

It seemed as if their very outlook on life was gloomy and dreadful.

Or maybe it didn’t mean anything at all.

But that’s how she saw it.

2. Maybelline and Angelita felt at peace in a carnival.

It was a peculiar thing, yes.

But teen twins Maybelline and Angelita felt at peace in a carnival. The festive music, bright lights, and tasty treats was Heaven to them.

It all felt so beautiful and lovely!

Especially when it was just them there.

Well, actually, it’s never been just them.

But they wished.

Oh, they wished.

3. Nova and Philippa remember Ryan’s scared reaction.

“Remember how frightened he got once he saw you?”

“Yes! It was priceless!”

“I’d pay to see that reaction again.”

“Yeah, me too.”

4. All alone, in her house

Philippa wished she didn’t revert to her demon form whenever she was scared. That scared away potential friends.

People came and left the haunted house. The haunted house with the dead clown girl.

They all wanted to see her. They always regretted doing so.

Why couldn’t they just leave her be?

Why?



5. A moment with Violet and Philippa

The girl appeared out of nowhere in her life.

Philippa wasn’t complaining, though. Violet was a distraction from…from her.

Violet was just what she needed. Someone to love. Someone to care for. Someone who would do the same for her.

And now they sat on front of her family’s house,on the steps, watching the sky fade into the evening rose pink.

The air smelled sweeter with her around.

“How did you feel when Jennifer died?”

Philippa stiffened. Her hand went cold and clammy.

Why…why would she dare say her name? Why would Violet want to know how she felt?

Maybe she was just curious. Maybe Philippa should just let go.

She sighed.

“I-I-I-I was...well...I...”

Her words were interrupted by a kiss from Violet.

Well, it was supposed to be a kiss. But it didn’t feel like it. It felt like she was trying to destroy her lips, like she wanted to peel them off.

Her heart pounding in her chest was love. That desperate, crazed feeling was love. The kiss was love. Violet was love. Violet loved her just as good as Jennifer did. Violet wanted the best for her.

Violet Violet Violet love love love Violet Violet Violet love love love Violet Violet Violet love love love-

THIS. WAS. LOVE.


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Hi, super quick review for these stories!
Unfortunately this is an out-of-context review because I have not read the previous chapters, but hopefully this will still be a helpful review!
Story 1: Very short but also interesting - I wonder who she saw that had black clothes.
Story 2: This story seems very mysterious. The ending seems to suggest that thy really want to be alone in the carnival.
Story 3: I curious to know what they did to him that made him so scared. Without context, it seems really spooky.
Story 4: Seems to be a sad story, since she turns into a demon every time she becomes scared. Sounds like a terrible curse to have. You wrote this story very well, it carries a lot of emotion in it.
Story 5: This is a very sweet story. You described things very well in this story, especially how Phillipa felt when Violet kissed her. It's a very heartwarming story, you write love stories really well!
Overall, they were very meaningful stories, I hope to review more of this series. Happy writing!

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Hey vampricone! Just a short review on this one as the pieces are pretty short themselves so I don't have a huge amount of commentary!

1. I liked the insight into Calypso, but I think you started off this one stronger than you finished it. The idea that it might not mean anything is valid, but I think we as the reader can infer that Calypso might not be right. I think you could either flip it around so the uncertainty comes first, or use the last two lines to say something else.

2. Only minor comment here is that they wouldn't be 'just them' if they were in a crowd, would they?

3. I liked this one - short but sweet!

4. I think the two points here kind of conflict - Pippa wants friends but also wants everyone to leave her along. I think this could be explored a little further for more clarity.

5. A great one to end on!

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He saw it in her eyes. The anguish, the frustration. The terrible nothing that clawed inside and sought to smother her. She knew. It was there, inside. She had been broken. Then she smiled. Oh, storms. She smiled /anyway/. It was the single most beautiful thing he'd seen in his entire life.
— Brandon Sanderson, Words of Radiance