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Penelope felt herself go with joy as she walked down the aisle, her father at her side, John waiting at the altar.
Her parents and Nova, her daughter’s ghost, were happy that she was giving John another try, but most of all, Penelope was happy.
Perhaps her powers wouldn’t be a danger to him. Perhaps they could be together, despite all odds.
She missed him so and he missed her too.Maybe everything would be okay after all.
When Penelope reached John, her father let go and sat with her mother.
Holding his hands, looking into his eyes, it felt right.
Penelope loved John. John loved Penelope.
Wasn’t their love all that mattered, in the end?
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Hi, I'm here for a review! I'll admit I'm missing a lot of context, but I think there's a lot to be inferred just from this short piece.
First, it's clearly a marriage. And Penelope is very happy about it, that much is clear. Interestingly enough, despite Penelope's joy at the marriage, it doesn't seem like the narrative agrees with her. At first, it seemed pretty normal (apart from the ghost stuff in the second paragraph which I assume has to do with the context I'm missing), but with how much the narrative is emphasizing how important over everything else the marriage is to Penelope, the reader can't help but wonder what the "everything else" is, which is great writing! Well done ^^
I'll try to check out other stuffs soon!
yosh
Thx for the review!
Hmm even without context I like this one. I like the hints that the character knows abt the supernatural, like the mention that her daughter has a ghost and that’s completely normal or that she’s hoping that her own powers wont be acting up!
Found a missing space: “She missed him so and he missed her too.Maybe”
I like that she found John despite all the hardships that came before. Hope that it will work out for them! Because especially that last sentence makes me fear that somewhere in this folder will lurk something horrible that’s abt to happen to them ^^°
Thx for reading!!