Love Me Not

I'm not sure if this will make sense or even be considered an accurate interpretation of the poem's tone, but I kind of felt that this was more of a sweet poem than a negative or self-deprecating one. It seems that the speaker is well aware of their follies, which for some reason made me smile -- I'm probably crazy, but I found it enjoyable (and even relatable) that they're able to point out so many little things that they notice about themselves, but others likely wouldn't.

I like that you mixed in small issues (shoelaces) with bigger ones like living a day without stress; it sort of balances everything out and this combination of serious and silly is what gave off more of a sweet vibe than anything else.

In terms of suggestions, this is a stylistic one but I was thinking that this poem may benefit from a lack of capitalization, if that makes sense. I am personally a fan of messing around with caps in order to change the intended interpretation/tone of a piece and I feel like this poem would be that much more significant if you added in that element of lowercase all throughout, but this is just a small personal suggestion.

All in all I like it! I enjoyed the relatively consistent rhyme scheme as it helped keep a rhythm running steadily in my head as I was reading.

Write on! <3

**My Thoughts**

That opening line was great. It hooked me in, I knew this would be an unique poem right when I read that line. Hey @vagrant, LZ here with a review! Let me just say, I love this poem. I relate to (most of) this poem.

**Formatting and Grammar**

As for formatting, it was great! The poem looks very neat and clean. I appreciated how you only used four lines per stanza in this poem.

As for grammar (this isn't really grammar, but oh well), it was all good but one thing. Throughout the poem, you rhyme perfectly! Then at these lines:

I never judge a book by its cover.
I trust easily and later face trouble.

Hey there @vagrant . I just went through your poem and could relate with it so much. I often mention it to my best friends about being such a big mess myself. I don't know is it just our negative thoughts that lead our mind into thinking this way or is it just our bad luck that we get into trouble.
Anyways , getting back to your work. The things you described in your second stanza hit me hard ; I could personally imagine myself going through such emotions. I really felt connected here. It's good that you kept everything short and neat. There was a nice flow throughout your poem. I enjoyed your work. Keep writing!

Hi vagrant. I am here to review your work. And to tell you that your work is beautiful. And.....
You have to know that there are people who has worst.(Ah! I sound like my teacher)You know what, I feel bad for myself even if it was just a piece of eraser. I agree with you I am a mess and so is the world.
Review time!
'I never judge a book by its cover.'
It doesn't fit with other line that goes after and before it. I am not sure if it was type O, or a mistake of writing in the first place. It would be better if you fix it.


'I trust easily and later face trouble.'
I think you should add a comma after easily. It not that important but you never know.
'I trust easily, and later face trouble.'

'I always miss my aim, at the garbage can.'
It's a little thing. You there isn't any reason to put comma after 'aim'. It doesn't have any conjunctions. And 'at the garbage can' is prepositional phrase.

As always no offense
Keep on writing

>Chris Dixon