A Veil of Clouds

I agree with LastPaladin.

There's something very off-putting about your wording, and how you mix technical terms with softer things. (ex: "a light source glows from behind a veil of clouds")
It seems counter-intuitive to have the given subject matter presented so harshly and without finesse.
There's no emotion or feeling of movement, and in the end it feels like a superficial copy that lacks the depth of something real, fluid and human.
But even though it's coming across as stilted and vacant, the ideas are there!
I suggest doing more reading, and then reflecting upon how to take an abstract concept and make it poetic. It isn't all about fluffy words, you need some solid substance as well.

Good luck!

Lovely. Nice water-like-flow to it all.Nice words and meaning. Good job!

I'm LastPaladin and I shall be your reviewer, this piece struck as something trying to be deep but missing the mark as even though it has the imagery it doesn't really try show us this, see a piece that shows as opposed to tell, is stronger in context. This here just doesn't seem to hit the mark. But best way for me to really help is elaborate on what I'm saying, so here I offer my thoughts.

To explain what I'm getting at, I shall first praise you on some of the imagery, the fact it doesn't seem to connect is quite a bother it just seems a list of things --- perhaps loosely connects is better, but even still they should connect a bit more, right now it seems like a list, more like the plan of a poem. I shall this this imagery here and then move on to this piece and so on and so forth. It doesn't come across as poetic, worse still as Aqua said it doesn't show, as much as telling us everything in some cases this can work, rarely I may say. Here it doesn't do you a favour, your concept seems totally worthless without the actual invitation to experience said poem. It's much like trying to dive into a pool to find it's been iced up and you slam your head on the ice and wake up with a bloody scalp. Graphical I admit, but a poem shouldn't block entry, it should invite you in, say 'Come in my friend' not scream 'No room, no room' which this does and even though the theme is quite pretty it's lost on us because we don't care, our heads hurt, the ice hasn't melted and we're left feeling cheated.

Overall: You need to allow readers entries without this imagery falls flat, without this it's hard to find a saving grace as the reviewers were desperately trying to keep reading it, but as you didn't try take us in, it's impossible to point out lines we like. But just because this is rather harsh I shall try.

Air pauses, confounded by it's passenger.
Time halts to conceive it's conqueror

Hi, theboy! Wow, I love this poem! It's just awesome! Good work! My favorite part is "Each grain of sand is a thought from the people of the world." Thanks for posting this! Baiii

In my dream I walk along the yellow beach of humanity.

Each grain of sand is a thought from the people of the world.

Some stay and are kept forever. Some are swept away by the chilling waves,

Even as the sun glints blue – grows cold and dies away,
a light source glows from behind a veil of clouds
to shine a golden warmth over the sand-

Illuminating the grains with brilliant light.
Air pauses, confounded by #FF0000 ">it's passenger.
Time halts to conceive it's conqueror
The cold waters are trapped. Blinded by their own expression.
Life is what hides behind the veil.
The warm glow of hope is what beams down.

Hello!

Grammar:

I'm not going to do nitpicks, but in your poem the grammar is quite off-putting and, for me, really detriments the flow and overall feel. As some people have pointed out, you split sentences when you don't need to, which gives lines a very jarring feel. Also, at the ends of lines you use a lot of full-stops when you could use commas, which again makes reading it very stilted. With poetry, a general rule can be to punctuate it like prose.

Show, Don't Tell:

Right now, in your poem you do a lot of 'This is my point/idea' and then simply telling the reader what it is. For example, you use some good imagery in there, but instead of showing the reader what the veil/light is, you simply use the last two lines to tell them. This is a pretty easy way out, as I feel like you could tell them in a better way - poetry isn't about spelling everything out for the reader, feel free to leave them thinking.

Overall:

Sometimes, I felt like you were being unnecessarily wordy here. For example:

a light source glows from behind a veil of clouds

Illuminating the grains with brilliant light.

This was really good, and it had a smooth flow to it. The only thing really is that you do a lot of telling, and even though you do a good job with keeping it original and descriptive, I would've liked it this went a little deeper. All the same, it's still really good.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

Hey Thatboy!
I would like to start with, amazing piece! It flows wonderfully and you had some great word choices! For me it was a nice length, if a poem gets too long I lose interest The only problem I see is this;

thatboy wrote:The cold waters are trapped. Blinded by their own expression.

Hello, thatboy. I'm Freak. I really love this poem. It is so amazing. No joke. You have great imagery and I get a sense of calmness.

Nitpicks, though :

In my dream I walk along the yellow beach of humanity.
Each grain of sand is a thought from the people of the world.
Some stay and are kept forever. Some are swept away by the chilling waves,
swished along black oil and are drowned instantly by the unforgiving nature of the #FF0000 ">see #BF0000 ">Not "sea?".
Even as the sun glints blue – grows cold and dies away,
a light source glows from behind a veil of clouds
to shine a golden warmth over the sand-
Illuminating the grains with brilliant light.
Air pauses, confounded by it's passenger.
Time halts to conceive it's conqueror #BF0000 ">(Period)
The cold waters are trapped. #BF0000 ">(No period - comma) Blinded by their own expression.
Life is what hides behind the veil.
The warm glow of hope is what beams down.

Very well done. You certainly paint a picture I can see, and the way you subtley describe things is the best part of it. I agree with Kwantack on the capitalization thing, you should definitely change that. I also found one other mistake:

Air pauses, confounded by it's passenger.
Time halts to conceive it's conqueror

This is fantastic! I love the flow. The only thing I can think of is that the majority of the lines are capatalized while two (or three, I forgot) are not, and you might want to consider changing that, but I really liked it! Keep writing!