White Wolf

Hey there, @restlessheart14! Though you may never see this, I am here to review your unique poem!

I like your description of the white wolf, even if others may find it to be verbose or redundant. You've also done a fairly good job of describing a lone white wolf at night, amidst a small village in a valley. I've read this as a calmer, more wistful poem; I feel as though someone is woefully remembering the wolf, as though it is no longer there.

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!

I really like this poem even if the repeatment of the same line is kind of ruining it because it makes it pretty obvious.
At least I love to see that hint of mystery you could put in your poetry so it is more challenging and interesting. Of course, I am not saying this is a bad poetry. I love the way you describe the wolf in very different ways. Before leaving, I want to say that you need punctuation marks on one ir two places.

Your fur is snow glistening white through the night breezes

Until the sun awakens and gently shows the silver orb sleep

Nice poem! I like how you described the wolf and the word selection you used.
However, there where one or two things I spotted that could be fixed:

. 'Until the sun awakens and gently shows the silver orb (add coma after "orb") sleep'

. Thai is just an option, but I would say that you could end on the 'White Wolf' verse. I feel like that might sound better-again, this is optional and just my prefrance.

. 'Your fur is (like) snow (add coma after "Snow") glistening white through the night breezes'

Those where the only things I found so great job! Keep on writing!
-Gymnast2801

On a whole I really like this poem! The description of the wolf is very well written and I really like the detail and use of imagery. Maybe their is a little to much repetition of 'White Wolf'. What you could try is to leave the reader guessing as to what you are describing and then at the very end of the poem write, 'white wolf...' You could do this by changing the title maybe?? This is just an idea! Good luck but keep on writing because this piece has LOTS of potential!

I think that the flow was good. But one thing I didn't like was the use of White Wolf over and over. I think you used it a little to much. But I like the description you give throughout it and overall it was very good restlessheart14. Keep on writing and I hope to read more of your work.

I like what you're doing. The sentences do flow together nicely, but I honestly don't know how I feel about the white wolf repetition.
I see what you're trying to do, and for parts it does work. But maybe you could have white wolf after every other sentence instead of every sentence, just to keep it moving.
None of this was meant to be offensive! I do love your poem and I feel you did a great job! Keep up the good work!

I like what you're doing. The sentences do flow together nicely, but I honestly don't know how I feel about the white wolf repetition.
I see what you're trying to do, and for parts it does work. But maybe you could have white wolf after every other sentence instead of every sentence, just to keep it moving.
None of this was meant to be offensive! I do love your poem and I feel you did a great job! Keep up the good work!

I like what you're doing. The sentences do flow together nicely, but I honestly don't know how I feel about the white wolf repetition.
I see what you're trying to do, and for parts it does work. But maybe you could have white wolf after every other sentence instead of every sentence, just to keep it moving.
None of this was meant to be offensive! I do love your poem and I feel you did a great job! Keep up the good work!