Young Writers Society

Hey Tinybookfaire here for a review...

This was a very interesting poem. To be honest, this is the first work I’ve ever encountered with this high of a rating. I’m guessing you edited it so that there won’t be much cussing words because I don’t see much bad words except for the “Damn” part that Mangline was referring to either. So I’m not technically sure on what to say becasue this was actually a really detailed poem and I love the fact that there were details. All I would suggest is Maybe capitalize the first word of each sentence. Or not....you don’t have to ‘cause it’s totally up to you, but i’m Just putting it out there.

Also, I’ve never really read much romantic works here in YWS except for this one. I mean, I have but not as ROMANTIC as this one. (If you know what I mean))). First time for everyone, i guess. Lol.
Anyway, great job and keep writing!

~Tinybookfarie

Ok, I'm here for the review. I think your punctuation could've been a bit better, and I think that it would improve your writing without the cursing? And, what's with the,

"so long as we are forever and always running out of time?"

But, other than that, I liked it.

It was very romantic, and it explains to the reader how close and intimate the (I'm assuming) couple are to each other.

Have a good day/ afternoon/ night.

Oh, and, try to work on your writing skills, ok? Thanks. The best of luck,

MANGLINE.

That was cute

Hey there , here for the review.

let me appreciate your work here.
You can add genre here .I felt comedy .It was flirtatious . I litterly laughed in following lines .

1)Your hot breath against my skin,

2(but which damn line says you can’t be mine

3)so long as we are forever and always running out of time?

Few words on how to improve it .
you used all small letters here . New lines of the poem must contain capital letters .
otherwise it is nice poem .

have a great day ahead .