The Droplet Of Love In His Blood

Heya nishthabawa2896 !!!

This is Eros here yo write a review on your really beautiful imaginations!!!

Hats off to your skill! It was really great. I loved it very much. This ha a beautiful imagination and it really made me happy. I like the title, "The droplet of love in his blood". It is very awesome and it conveyed everything you want to say. I like how your have expressed it.

The lines:

It was a droplet of trust which drained on me from his veins

It was droplet of purity which spurt on me from his eyes

It was a droplet of love which came on me from his heart

Hi jessiebear. Ok nishthabawa2896 this is good I really like it but I think it needs a little more work. Like I think it needs some fall stops hire and there, and I think you are you sing it a little to much maybe say sum thing ells instead. But over all it is good

Hi there. Ahem. This is my third review so I am really feeling honoured to review such a beautiful poem.
It took me a while to get the imagery but now I can visualize it clearly after noticing the structure

I absolutely LOVE the transitions you use at every first line of every passage

"Droplet of love on my hands to a droplet of love which drained from his veins" - I love the way you add in a transition here. Not sure if that was intentional but that sounded superb!

"Droplet of purity which spurt on me from his eyes and a droplet of love which came on me from his heart" - this too sounded pretty awesome!


"be with me as always" - could add a comma here to give a little more dramatic, fading effect at the end.

The last few lines sound more like a letter, more emotional, sensitive or how should I put it - it's got more of a personal feeling - of joy and sorrow. It kind of made me thing this poem was about a breakup, maybe?

When I look at it on the whole, it kind of feels like a breakup or the death of a lover but the death of a lover sounds a bit improbable since you mention the lines. "Be with me as always as I really love you" and "I really respect for what you do for me" - gives it a present tense feel which means the guy is alive.

Please clarify me on this or maybe I'm reading between the lines a bit too much, ha-ha.
A few last points, work on the punctuation a bit. Punctuation is like the transitional effects of a movie, it can dramatize stuff even more and add depth to every element.

Anyway, one word - AWESOME!

Keep writing! Your poetry will get places. It has that quality. Just believe and move forward.

Hi. Newbie. Not entirely certain if this is the orthodox way to review things, so tolerate me if it sounds a bit annoying.

Poetry is a...strange genre. It's a shifting beast, a monster that was never meant to be tamed, never meant to be held back by social norms and frivolous moral debates. So I'm careful when reviewing poetry, because it usually entirely depends on the reader whether the authors' struck a nerve or whether they haven't.

In my case, I can say that yes, it did strike some nerve in my frigid heart. This is a very old-fashioned poem, a lovely one at that, but I felt that it could a good read through, a voice in the dark. For example. "it made me to love him like crazy..." The 'to' in this wasn't necessary, "it made me love him like crazy" will do.

And while I'm at it, a suggestion you don't have to take; metaphors are a great help. Reading "It was like trees bearing juicy fruits on them" felt like it should've been "It was a tree bearing juicy fruits on it" or "Like trees bearing juicy fruits". Either way is nice, but I felt the first one might work better. Entirely up to you.

But while I am putting all of this out, I did like this. I especially liked the last part, where everything sort of descends into a thank you note, there was emotion in there. I hope you do get the chance to edit this, because it does have the opportunity to be great.