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Hello Mahira!

It's a nice and sweet poem based on your true feelings. I guess talks about the emotions that a student has after board exams. Going to different schools or opting different streams. Things do change after this and it's indeed an emotional period. Whether it's after the 10th boards or the 12th board exams. But the best thing is that your best friends will continue to have that special bond that will last forever.
I especially like the second stanza cause it has got a beautiful meaning behind it. A classroom is indeed a place full of all kinds of students, each one has a unique speciality and may have some unusual bondings.
The ending was nice and I guess it's true that we do part our ways. Each one takes a step ahead towards their own path and interests. But like I said we will still have those beautiful memories of our classrooms that we can cherish lifelong.

Great work!
Keep writing
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Hello again, Mahira! Ethan here for a review, brought to you by the gloriously earthy Team Raw Umber.

I loved this poem, it gave me a warm fuzzy feeling inside. It was very sentimental, and I really felt the emotions you must have had when writing this poem. And it overall flowed very well, too, so good job there as well!

That being said, I do have a couple minor technical critiques for you. First of all, the "......" did throw me off a little. Perhaps consider changing some of those to line breaks instead?

Also, I would probably go ahead and change the "u" to "you", just for propriety's sake. It's not a big deal, though.

Finally, I loved that last line, but it was a little clunky. Maybe try changing it to

But not the same way I once saw them,
Around me

Hi nanda,

This is a really sweet poem, I hope you were able to share it with at least some of your classmates as it's very touching.

There's a few minor formatting / phrasing things that I think could be changed to make the poem more impactful. First the use of ellipses (...) in poetry is often seen as a bit cliche or "over-dramatic" if you're going to use it properly it should just have three dots, but I would recommend just taking out the use of ellipses from your poem, there's no need for suspense in a poem like this, and it makes the poem seem hesitant rather than bold and expressive.

The other slight phrasing thing, is that I think the poem would communicate more sincerity if you spelled out "you" rather than "u" in stanza three.

Last, I think it's a bit distracting to have "Around Me" capitalized, maybe use italics or all-caps instead of just capitalizing those words.

I think my favorite lines in the poem are these,

"It may be a mere room
for those who don't sit here.
To me it's a heaven,

This poem means a lot to me, guyz! I just wish that all those who read it love it as much as I do. Your love would be the real appreciation for this work of mine and I would feel highly grateful to you all for your love and kindness you show towards this piece of writing. And yes, if possible don't forget to post a comment or a review for it is then that you would be able to read another piece of writing from me! Please do like,comment or review it guys and show your love!

Thank you
Mahira

This poem means a lot to me, guyz! I just wish that all those who read it love it as much as I do. Your love would be the real appreciation for this work of mine and I would feel highly grateful to you all for your love and kindness you show towards this piece of writing. And yes, if possible don't forget to post a comment or a review for it is then that you would be able to read another piece of writing from me!

Thank you
Mahira

Hello, i am here to review this poem. I liked it very much because i believe it is very genuine and heartfelt. I love how much unity between you and your classmates this poem inspires. It is wonderful to share secrets with friends or to laugh with them. I like how you compare school with paradise, it reminds me of when i was in school and listened mirthfully to everyone round me.
My favourite line is

"The studious and the notorious
the lethargic and the curious
all around me!"

These lines describe classmates and take me down memory lane of my times in class where i attentively studied the people around me looking to classify them into categories based on their personalities and how they acted. That line about cake brought to the surface almost forgotten memories of mine...that time i made fruit salad with my classmates. It was delicious we even added whipped cream.
You ended the poem beautifully, knowing that time will pass, and you won't see them forever but in a way they'll be in your heart. Life is full of surprises and loves to be mysterious. You never know the people who you will meet or the people who you will remeet, but overall, despite the trials, the gift of life is a fascinating, thrilling, wonderful experience.And this poem is amazing.