Pokemon Ultimate Evolution Season Two: Episode 23, Flare

by dark

Published August 22, 2014

16+ Language Violence

In Pokemon Season 2

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language and violence.

"He certainly made the right call inventing these beds." Jason smiled. "Look, it's like the wound was never there."

"I guess we can rest easy for now..." Will sighed.

"Those two are still out there, Will." Cristina said. "We can't let our guard down yet, but Ryan should wake up soon and we'll be able to ."

"Yeah... This is gonna sound, uh, insensitive and selfish, but I'm not worried about them attacking you. I'm just glad I didn't let someone else down." Will shook his head. "Sorry."

"It's fine, Will." Jason shrugged. "Without you, Ryan probably would've died. We're glad you came here to help, and all on your own, too. Plus, you're kind of looking after us, which is gonna make Ryan very happy for sure."

"You're very welcome, both of you." Will nodded "It was a long walk, I'll say, and as you already know, I was scared to even try."

"Oh, where did you have to walk from?" Cristina asked.

"Happinae City, it lines the east coast of Abstar. I'm a mountain person, and up there, they're really beautiful."

"Sound's cool." Jason said. He turned his head towards where I lie on the bed as he heard me stir. "Ryan's waking up!"

"Are- are you sure?" Pan said softly. She back up as soon as Jason looked at her standing timidly in the doorway.

"He hasn't moved at all until now, so probably." He said.

Pan forced herself to smile. "That's a relief..." She said, tucking a few loose red curls behind her ear. "I'll, uh, I'll go back to keeping watch I guess..." She quickly darted out of the doorway.

"Guess she's still coming to terms with what you said." Cristina sighed.

"Don't worry, she'll forget about all of that when Ryan wakes up; she'll be all over him..." Jason sighed. "

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"Only a few minutes left, bud." Giri said, tapping the face of his watch. "Just making sure it's still working fine. You know how the 'regular' laws of physics are broken in the regular world? Well here, gravity and magnetic fields can sometimes screw with watches and things like that."

"Wow, I never would of guessed." Flannery rolled her eyes.

"Ugh, this personality issuer is the first thing I'm working on next time I do repairs." Giri, groaned. "I know that's not you. You're not really the sarcastic type, Flannery."

"Mmm, sorry..." She yawned.

"It's okay, sweetie." Giri grinned. "So, Ryan, how do you feel?"

"I feel like a Slaking on a slow work day: tired and bored." I said. "That's gonna change when I'm back though."

"What makes you think that?" Flannery asked.

"Just the fact that when I'm up, I'm not resting again until Jake and Karen are dead." I couldn't help but show an evil smirk. "Oooh, Giri I can't wait..."

"Well, good luck with that." He shrugged. "I hope Karen is that cute in person. What did you think when you last saw her?"

"When I was getting nearly impaled and shocked by her Dark Pulse."

"Oh, right..." Giri said nervously.

"You're really into her like that?" I asked.

"Isn't it obvious?" Flannery interrupted. "Trust me I know when most guys are interested in someone."

"Whatever floats your boat, man. However, in my opinion, your boat is a bit holey."

"You say that like I was asking for your permission..." Giri growled. "Forget about it, Ryan. I shouldn't have asked."

"No, you shouldn't have." I groaned and held my head in my hand. Flannery sat down next to me and took my free hand.

"What's the matter?" She asked. "You look little pale."

"He's going back." Giri said. "Just a side effect I guess. He'll most likely be fine when he's back home."

"I can't wait." I smiled, closing my eyes. I'm ready to finish this little game.

"Hurry back, Ryan." Flannery said, releasing my hand. "Tell Jason-"

"That you love him and that you want him to move on?" I said. I didn't open my eyes, but I could almost feel her nod at me. "I will."

A pale blue light radiated off of my body and dispersed in a matter of seconds, leaving an empty space where I was sitting.

"I wonder if he'll ever come back..." Giri said.

"Why would you want that?" Flannery shot a glare at him.

"No, I don't mean like that. I just have a feeling that he could travel in between worlds, you know, without dying. He does have a Giratina in him."

"Oh... Well, if he can, I would love to see him again."

"Yeah, me too. He could really help me out with this place."

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I yawned an opened my eyes, and was greeted by Pan's cute smile.

"Hey, you!" She beamed. "It's about damn time!"

"Wow, Pan. You. Are. Loud." I returned her smile. "It's good to see you too."

I sat up and hugged her tightly.

"It's good that you've already  got your strength back." She giggled. "Guys come in here! He's back!"

No sooner had Jason, Cristina, and Will joined us, all except Will hugging me tightly. "Excited as ever, aren't you?" I laughed. "Could you let me go now? As much as I'd like to hug you forever, I can't do much else." They all obliged; Pan tarrying a bit before finally letting go of me.

"It felt like forever, waiting for you to wake up, Ryan." Cristina said.

"I know, I know, but I'm here now, and we've still got some stuff to take care of." Everyone nodded as I spoke. I hopped off the bed and clenched my fist. "I'm gonna take two the both of them!"

"Hey, guys.." Pan said. "Can you leave us... alone, just for a little bit?"

"Sure, Pan." Jason replied. "Come on, it's getting dark, we should watch for them." They all walked out of the room; Will shut the door behind them. "Good, I needed to tell you something. I did something, something you'll probably hate me for..."

"Save it, I saw everything; I tell you how later." I said, hushing her.

"You did?" She took a step back and gazed downward. "You're furious with me aren't you?"

"To a certain extent, but given the circumstances, I understood why you acted the way you did." I answered. "I only ask that you really try harder to control you anger, not direct it at us. I don't want you to forget that we're family. Can you do that for me?"

"Of course, Ryan! I could never forget that, never!" She cried.

"Pan, calm down, I get it." I pated her shoulder. "Now, why don't we end this silly game of theirs? What do you say?"

"Right!" She exclaimed.

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"So, what do we do now?" Karen asked, perched behind him on the house adjacent to mine.

"Well, I was going to say storm the house like you said, but look!" Jake pointed into the street. "They're just sitting there, waiting. Almost like they've given up!"

"They're not giving up, Jake." Karen growled. "Those little freaks are ready to take any attack head on!"

"Don't panic, we just need to-"

"Jake, I don't panic." Karen interrupted.

"Yes, you've let me know that before, but just listen. The boy with the sickle haircut and the red haired short kid aren't anywhere to be found, so its not like we're out numbered. I can say for certain that something's changed in there; what could've made them so bold? Wait, a minute..." Jake looked up at a large  mysterious, grey cloud forming over my house. He watched it as the wind blew, realizing that it wasn't natural.

Karen poked him "You done staring at Pan, Jake? I think we need to go in."

"No, it's that storm cloud. It stays stationary even with the wind."

"Yeah, so?"

"Think about it. Natural clouds wouldn't behave like that. What type of Pokemon would have the ability to create clouds, storm clouds?" Jake asked.

"A Water type?" Karen answered. "It might just be Pan. I guess she doesn't know how well we do in the rain."

"No, Karen, an Electric type..." Jake sighed. "I hope what I'm thinking isn't true."

"It's not. I mean, no it can't be. I never fail when it comes to stabbing people, It's like, impossible for me." Karen stammered.

"I hope you're right." Jake sighed. "Let's go, you attack from the other side of the street, make sure they can't see you."

"Got it."

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"I don't get it. We're not supposed to attack them?" Pan asked.

"Not exactly. Until the light gets here, we just need to keep them moving. Then we'll get them while they're blind." Cristina answered.

"How do you know this will work?" Pan said.

"I don't. It might not work, and they might overwhelm us. I mean, yeah, they'd get killed after Ryan loses it, and destroys the city, but I doubt that will happen."

"Cristina, I don't wanna sound so negative, but what if they know about the Flash Bombs too?"

"They won't. Do you want to know why I think that?"

Pan nodded.

"It's simple, because Ryan said they said they wouldnt," Cristina giggled. "and I'll always trust him."

"That's awesome to hear." Pan smiled. She stared up at them moon, spotting the tininess little twinkles. "It's almost here, when I say so, close you eyes tight."

"I can fix that for ya!" Karen leapt off my house and swiftly sucker punched Cristina and Pan to the ground. "Too easy! Are all of you idiots?"

"Dammit, Karen, I said to wait!" Jake shouted from across the street. He quickly ran to her side.

"You two are the idiots." Pan groaned.

"See this is why I told you to wait,now we're open to attack here!" He exclaimed. "Dammit, Karen, you never listen."

"Hold it together, you spaz!" Karen transformed and pecked his nose. "We took out their bait, we're fine. Stay in the air, and do not let yourself get hit!"

 Jake obeyed and circled the street with her. "See, we're fine. Maybe I should be the one giving orders." She stuck her tongue out at him.

"Don't start, Karen. This isn't the time for that." Jake said firmly.

"Well, that didn't go as planned. We didn't even get to attack them." Pan said flipping onto her back. "Ow, my head..."

"Well, it kinda did. We did almost get knocked out, but they decided to stay in the air." Cristina winced. "All we had to do was keep them in the air, right?"

"Yeah, but you just got socked in the back of the head. Don't you think Ryan's going a little bit crazy in that cloud?" Pan asked, standing up and leaning against the houses wall.

"That's gonna turn out better than you think." Cristina smirked.

----

"You ready, Will?" I asked, peeking through the mist of the cloud.

"Yeah, just about." He answered. "While we still have time left, how did you make this thing anyway? I didn't know it was possible to stand on clouds?"

"It's a legendary thing I guess." I said. "The first time I did this, I didn't even know how it happened."

"Okay, then. So, uh, all I have to do is keep them in a tight space?" Will asked, nervously. "Won't they be able to fly out of the Razor Wind it?"

"No bird their size can handle the force of a Razor Wind attack, and from an Absol no less." I gave him a thumbs up. "Even if you fail, which I doubt you will, you'll at least cut them up a bit. Oh, I can't wait."

"Jeez, man, I know you sisters just got punched and everything, but you're really getting crazy."

"Well, you don't  know me that well, Will. If you did, it wouldn't surprise you."

"Whatever you say." Will shrugged. He held up his hands and closed his eyes. "The wind's coming in bit early. Sorry, I'm not very good at this."

"That's fine. Just keep it light, and get them a little dizzy."

"I'll do my best, Ryan."

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"Look at those two, just staring at us." Karen said in a disgusted voice. "I really just wanna kill 'em."

"Not until we find out what's in the cloud, for the last time!" Jake yelled.

"Okay, okay, calm down." Karen pouted. "Maybe this is all apart of their plan. Letting us tire ourselves out."

"Would you rather be a sitting duck like last time?" Jake said. "I got shot into a concrete wall, remember?"

"Yeah, so did I!"Jake snapped.

"Yeah right, you had my body to soften your impact, you selfish little girl!"

"Knock it off, Jake. We're tearing ourselves apart!" Karen shut him down. "We can yell and scream at each other all we want, after we're done here, got it?" 

"Yeah..."

They continued to circle the house and the cloud, until they started bumping into each other."

"Dude, knock it off!" Karen said. "You're not tired, are you?"

"No, it's this damn wind. It just stared kicking up out of nowhere. Don't you feel it?"

Karen opened her mouth to answer, but was swiftly knocked into Jake from a sudden gust, knocking them into the street. They shifted into their normal bodies and stared up at the sky in shock.

"I swear that wasn't me..." Karen panted. She touched her cheeks and looked at blackish blood on her hands. She gasped and rolled off of Jake, starting wide eyes at her hands.

"What is it; what cut you?" He asked. He looked back into the sky at the cloud.

"Razor Wind." Karen said. "Dammit..."

The two of them screamed into the air when a sudden flare blinded them, causing a burning sensation in their eyes.

"Guys!" Pan yelled with her eyes, shut tight. "Get them!"

I jumped out of the cloud, staying right over them and shot a forceful wavelike Thunder at their flailing bodies. The shock wave shaped itself like a red eyed dragon, similar to what happened in the woods. I couldn't help but burst in a maniacal laughter as they screamed even louder and finally stopped moving.

I'm always going to protect them, especially from scumbags like you...

The last sparks petered out of my palms as I dropped to the ground.

I stared at them, completely unfazed by the flare coming from the moon.

"Ugh, that's it..." Jake barely managed to say. "You win. Just kills us already, I can't handle this pain..."

"Nah, I think I'll just pull up a chair and watch you two suffer for a bit." I laughed. "Oh, and Karen, sweetheart, next time you try to kill someone, well there won't be a next time, but make sure they're dead before you leave them. That was the downfall of those of you."

Karen turned her head next to my, her eyelids twitching as if she was struggling to open them. "Screw you, Sparker."

"Love you, too, Karen."

I turned around to leave but was blocked by a growing wall of fire. "What the hell is going on?" I exclaimed. The fire formed a sphere around us and lifted us into the air and grew hotter and hotter inside. Jake and Karen couldn't muster the slightest bit of energy to scream as the fire burned their backs. I looked some through gaps flames and saw the fire's source. Jason stood across from us. His eyes shined light blue as he held his hands up to lift the sphere higher.

"This is for Flannery!" He bellowed. The ball became smaller and hotter. I had no choice but to throw myself through the fire. The sphere exploded above me and rained down embers as I plunged into the street. Jake and Karen landed on the ground and their bodies finally began to disappear.

Comments & reviews · 4
TheCrimsonLady wrote a review Review · Sep 28, 2014

Hello!
Aurora here for a quick review day review!
I haven't read the previous chapters/episodes, but I'm sure I can do a mostly decent job.

Alright, nitpicks first.

"Don't worry, she'll forget about all of that when Ryan wakes up; she'll be all over him..." Jason sighed. "
Stray apostrophe you've got there, love.

"Ugh, this personality issuer is the first thing I'm working on next time I do repairs."
Issuer? Haha. Typos! Also, you want a comma after repairs, not a period, darling.

"I feel like a Slaking on a slow work day: tired and bored." I said
Comma after bored, not a period.

"Oooh, Giri I can't wait..."
Comma after Giri, too.

"Trust me I know when most guys are interested in someone."
Comma after me.

Okay, you're writing in the first person. After Ryan leaves, how is he listening to their conversation? O.o..... *shrieks*.

"Guys come in here! He's back!"
Comma after guys, as well.

"I'm gonna take two the both of them!"
Whaat? I'm sorry, this sentence makes absolutely no sense to me.
At all.

The boy with the sickle haircut and the red haired short kid aren't anywhere to be found, so its not like we're out numbered.
It's, not its. Also, it might read better if you changed that to 'it isn't'

I never fail when it comes to stabbing people, It's like, impossible for me." Karen stammered.
It's is capitalized. Either un-caps it, or change the comma before it to a period to start a new sentence.

She stared up at them moon, spotting the tininess little twinkles. "It's almost here, when I say so, close you eyes tight."
Run-on sentence. Too many commas and not enough conjunctions. Maybe add an extra 'so' before the 'when'.

You repeat 'we're fine' too much :).

"While we still have time left, how did you make this thing anyway? I didn't know it was possible to stand on clouds?"
Not a question mark for the second sentence, you want a period there.

"Jeez, man, I know you sisters just got punched and everything, but you're really getting crazy."
Your, not you. Probably a typo, not a real grammatical error, I know.

They continued to circle the house and the cloud, until they started bumping into each other."
Stray quotation marks there, and you might want to add an 'at least' before the 'until' after the comma.

You win. Just kills us already, I can't handle this pain..."
Kill, not kills.

Oh, and Karen, sweetheart, next time you try to kill someone, well there won't be a next time, but make sure they're
Run on sentence. A huge one. You don't need the 'well there won't be a next time'- it's implied, and the sentence is both funnier and more dramatic without it :)

End of nitpicks.

Great chapter/episode you have here. The pacing lags a bit here and there, but that might just be me. Another thing you might want to consider is that it's so long. Splitting it up wouldn't do any harm, love.

I was also confused about who Ryan was or wasn't working with until the very end; of course, that could just be because I haven't read the previous episodes/chapters.
Also, I kept getting character mixed up.

At the very end, I wanted to know how painful it was (or non-painful) for Ryan to jump through that fire. You build up to that really well, but then it's sort of anti-climactic. More description, I think, would fix that.

Keep writing, love.
~Aurora

dark replied · Sep 28, 2014

Thanks for the review, dear! :twisted:

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KatGirl commented Comment · Sep 20, 2014

(throws up at sight of pokemon)

dark replied · Sep 21, 2014

Glad I could clear that bile blockage for ya! :twisted:

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heavymetal247 wrote a review Review · Aug 31, 2014

I like this, I haven't seen Pokemon in a while though :C. Anyway, it has a lot of dialogue, for the reader to make out each of the characters personality, which I like, you left a good space for imagination to take flight, which I really like. The only thing is the description is a bit low, you don't want to only flood the story with dialogue, but of course it is your choice, maybe describe more of the setting or something like that, it doesn't really bothering me because well I tend to do that myself, I only suggest doing this because you got to step in other peoples shoes once in awhile, but in my opinion I think it's great, it wasn't over done, and it was at a good pace for the reader to soak up all the information while at the same time reading. Great job and I hope you continue on with the story, thanks for sharing this (you make me want to watch Pokemon again) *Sighs* good times, anyway great job once again and of course Rock on!

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dark commented Comment · Aug 22, 2014

I tried my best not to make this episode seem rushed; I hope I pulled it off. Only a couple more episodes until the end of season two!
Then, I have a little something special, and hopefully not too cliché.



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