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Pokemon Ultimate Evolution Season 2: Episode 7, End Of Shader Part 1 of 3

by dark

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.

"AHH!! Dammit!" I exclaimed. "What was that sound?"

Gavin popped out of the Krystal Ball on his own and scurried to my side.

"Sir, what was that?" He asked. "Was there an earthquake or something? I really hope not."

"No, there wasn't. The sound made your Krystal Ball vibrate."

"I didn't hear any sound while I was in there."

"Well, whatever it was made my ears hurt a lot." I said, patting his side. "It must have been my sister, because that sound was similar to a Zekrom's roar. The thing is, it was more of a screech, which worries me. I hope my sister's not in too much danger. Only rage or fear could cause her to scream like that."

"Don't worry, sir, I'm sure she's okay. Yeah, yeah, she has to be. Any sibling of yours has to have a lot of will and power to get through anything." Gavin nodded.

"You're so optimistic, Gavin." I chuckled. "Alright, let's head back to the surface to investigate."

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Cristina woke up on the ground with a pounding headache. She got to her feet and stood there for a minute trying to remeber what had just happened. She then bagan to roam around the small room looking for an exit. She circled the room, time and time again, but couldn't find a place she could use to get out.

"Ooof, this headache isn't helping one bit.

She stopped walking around, sat in a black computer chair and stared at the monitors to see if she could see me. After only five minutes of staring at the small screens, she grew more and more drowsy, and began to succumb to the fatigue of her headache. She rested her head down on a screen and closed her eyes.

"Ryan, I hope you can find me..."

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"I should never have done this... I NEVER should have done this!!" Alex screamed.

He was pushing a metal crate off a cliff into a deep ocean far from the mansion. He pushed it to the edge and walked inside of it, shutting its rusty doors behind him.

"N-nobody will be able to find me in here..."

He ran to the back of the crate and slammed against its walls, forcing it to slide off of the cliff. Alex tumbled around inside it until it plunged into ocean and slowly sank to the bottom. Alex backed up into a back corner of the crate and sat there, without moving at all.

"I'm not going to die. I'm not going to die... I should have never started this. I should have never let Elec's death make me resort to this..." He couldn't control himself anymore. He was so overcome with fear that he finally realized what a fool he was. "Why, why why WHY!!?? WHY DID I DO ALL OF THIS WITHOUT EVEN HAVING A LEGITIMATE PLAN FIRST!!??"

Alex stared at his bleeding wrist from the bite wound inflicted by Cristina.he stopped shivering and looked at it intently. "How could she hurt me while in that form... I still do not understand..." He thought. "Could she be exactly like Ryan... No, no, no. It's already been proven that no one can be like him, but..."

He stared at the black gemstone in his hands.

"The Sparkers could all have such power, Even enough to break this. If they do that, my forest and Mansion will all go away. The Shader legacy will die.. l along with me..."

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I climbed the wall of the gaping hole beside Gavin to get back to the surface. When we returned to the surface, Gavin and I searched the Manison hall for the source of the roar.

"Where do we go now?" I asked Gavin.

"We could go up stairs. Yeah, yeah, definitely upstairs. That's the only place we can go anyway." He nodded. He walke over to the fragile stairs and shot string from his mouth into each and every crevice of the stairs to hold them together like a powerful glue. "We should be able to walk on them now. They won't fall apart."

"Well good. We don't need to be falling right now." I laughed.

We walked to the second floor of the mansion. The hall was completely bare. No furniture or blinds on the huge bay windows. No rugs or even a chandelier. The only light source was the large amount of black luminescent fire on the floor.

"I always wondered why this place doesn't burn down." Gavin said, pointing to the fire.

"Does seem a bit odd doesn't it. What's even stranger is how the fire doesn't give off any heat..."

"Ooooh riiight. Maybe we can walk through it then. The only thing that makes fire dangerous is its heat. Take that away and it's harmless, right? Yeah, yeah, definetly harmless. Let's go!"

Gavin scurried into the fire and stood in it for a while. I followed him into it. It almost felt like there wasn't any fire at all. It felt cold... Gavin suddenly broke out in laughter.

"What's up with you?" I asked.

"Hee hee, it tickles!" He said, giggling in between his words."

"Oh, okay."

I always thought fire was fun, but I didn't think it could provide a ticklish comfort...

Gavin steeped out of the cold, ticklish flames to relax from the firery fun he just had. He backed up into the wall cracking it ever so slightly.

"Isn't that lucky..." He said staring at the crack.

"What you find?" I asked, walking to his side.

"I feel a breeze coming from the crack I made. Maybe there's a hidden room or something behind here. We should check it out. Yeah, yeah, we should definitely check it out."

"Alright, stand back a bit."

Gavin obeyed and back up. I clenched my fist tightly and punched a hole straight into the wall and followed up with kick to bring the rest of it down.

Behind the wall was a hidden dank corridor that was lit up with torches on the side of the wall burning with black fire like the ones in the other room. It gave off no heat at all.

"Hey! I know this place!" Gavin exclaimed. "My home is all the way at the end of it. Kind of like our temporary homes but this is where we live most of the time, os that make it our official home. It's really crazy. I didn't know that this was on the other side of this wall.

"Speaking of Jillian, where is she anyway?"

"She should be further inside here, but we have so many tempaorary homes in this place that she could be in any one of them, but most likely she's in here."

"Well, we might as well look, my sister could be in here for all we know." I said, heading inside the hallway.

Gavin followed close by as I walked down to passage way. There were many webs bordering the sides of the passage.

"Ooo..." Gavin moaned.

"What's the matter?" I asked. "You feeling okay?"

"I'm okay, sir." He answered. "It's just that ever since I married her, I have never been separated from Jillian for this long."

"Ah, I see. Well look, we know she's not in any danger. That should be enough to keep you at ease. Just shrug it off, Gavin."

"It just makes me sad..."

"I understand, but we'll find soon. She's probably just resting somewhere which is why she hasn't come looking for you." I said, trying to comfort him.

"I guess so.. I'll try not to be so emotional anymore. That's not what a married Galvantula does. Where supposed to be strong willed spiders."

"Well, if you ask me, you have that covered, Gavin. I think it's sweet that you're concerned about her." I smiled. "If there's nothing at the end of this hallway then well check the outside next."

"Um I don't think we should, here isn't really anything for us out there."

"Okay then."

(x)(x)(x)(x)(x)

Cristina stood up from the chair and rested herself on the ground. She let her eyes fall open a small amount more, giving her a clever view of the web covered ceiling. Beyond the webs on the eastern portion of the ceiling was a large air vent that she thought she could fit through.

"Maybe I could get out through there." She thought. She staggered to her feet and pulled the computer chair under the air vent, climbed on top of it and began to tug on the web. The web was stuck firmly to the grate. She grabbed two fistfuls of of the web and tugged at it as hard as she could. The wheels on the computer chair rolled to the side, sending her plummeting to the floor.

"Ooo, ouch that hurt.." She groaned. She got to her feet once more and look the the fallen grating on the floor. She gasped when she saw a small sized Galvantula lying on top of it, writhing, violently.

"Oh, I'm so sorry!" Cristina exclaimed, running two its side. "Are you okay?"

The spider looked at her, it's eyes wide and watery.

"I'm fine. Are you okay??" It asked with a shaky voice

"I-I'm fine. I'm sorry about that, I didn't know that you were resting on the vent."

"It's okay, Cristina, I'm not hurt too badly, I feel fine actually." The spider giggled.

"Oh good." Cristina sighed, sitting up against the walls. "How do you know my name?"

"Hmm? Oh, that ghost guy, Alex talked about you a lot after he brought you here. He said things like, 'I've never seen such a young girl with such a nice body and such soft skin.' Ooo, hereing him talk made me so sick, so I'm going to beat him up again."

"Figures. I wouldn't blame you if you did. Even though I know he wouldn't dare touch me inappropriately. He's too afraid of my brother."

"You mean that guy he calls Ryan?" The spider asked.

"Yeah, Ryan's my brother. I've only seen a tiny amount of what he could do, so if Alex is so scared to carry out his original intentions just because he's afraid of Ryan, then he's a lot scarier than I thought. Good thing I don't have to worry about that."

"He seems cool." The spider smiled. "My name's Jillain by then way."

"Well, Jill, when we make Alex pay for causing all of this confusion and trouble,I'll be sure to let you have apart of it." Cristina laughed. "Oh, I wish I could remeber what happened before I blacked out."

"I think I know."

"Will you tel, me, Jill?"

"Sure!" Jill exclaimed. "I know you said that he was afraid of something, then he slapped you. I think after that, he was about to leave, but you bit him with your sharp teeth. It was like to went troughs some kind of mid transformation. You're teeth grew and you're eyes turned red. After you but him, he slammed your head against the wall and I guess you got knocked out. I think you forgot what happened because you were so mad."

Cristina's memory started to come back to her as Jill told her what happened.

"I think I remember now." She said. "Jill, why did I do that?"

"I don't know, Cristina. He was talking about how Ryan has some kind of rage. Maybe since you're his sister, you have the same kind. I would lose it, too if somebody slapped me for a dumb reason." Jill said.

"Yeah, I guess so. Well, lets stop worrying about that. When I find Ryan, I'll just sit down with him and talk about it. He alway helps me when I need it." Cristina stood up and sat in the computer chair. "Jill, we need to find a way out if here. Do you know how Alex gets in and out?" She asked Jill.

"Uuuuum, I think he come through the walls, you know, since he's a ghost Pokemon. Buuuut, I think the walls here are very weak after so many years of wear."

"Great!!" Cristina stung up from the chair and stood next to the back wall, she kicked the wall as hard as she could and it cracked greatly. She kicked it again and again, until the wall finnaly gave away and fell to her feet, revealing the outside of the back of the mansion.

"Wow, Cristina!!" Jill gawked in astonishment. "I didn't know you were so strong."

"Yeah, I didn't know I was either. I guess I overlooked myself. Oh, Alex is in for a big surprise. When I find him... Ooh it's going to be brutal." Cristina said with a sinister smile.

"Ooooh I can't wait!!" Jill exclaimed. "Let's head back to the front of the mansion."

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Gavin and I were already at the end of the long corridor before we reached a wall of webbing.

"I'm guessing this is your home, Gavin." I said.

"Yeah, yeah, that's my home." Gavin nodded. "Jillain and I built it ourselves, you know. Everything is from our webs. Would you let me go inside to see if she's in there? I want to make sure."

"Go ahead, kid, I bet she's looking for you too." I answered.

Gavin scurried through the large opening in the webbing.

"Gavin!! I'm going to wait for you at the entrance don't take too long!"

"I won't!!" I heard him say through the darkness of his home. "Go ahead!!"

I quickly ran back to the hole in the wall I made and waited patiently for Gavin. In a few minutes he was emerging from the hole with a sad look on his face.

"She wasn't there." He sniffed.

"Don't worry Gavin, she's not in any danger so why should you be worried?." I said. "She wouldn't want you to be sad like this."

"Yeah, yeah, you're right, sir. But, I'm her husband, so I'm supposed to look after her."

"You did just fine as a has and Gavin." I said. "I'm telling you, Jillian is probably going to meet up with us in as little as 10 minutes.

"Haha, I know.." His frown twisted into a smile. "Where else do you want to look for your sister, sir? I didn't think there is any more places but its worth a shot."

"Really? I though this place would have a lot more rooms, seeing as it's so big from the outside." I said.

"I thought that too, before I moved into here. The builder of this place is a master of illusions."

"Yeah. Looks there's nothing else we can do now, but we haven't found Cristina and Jillain yet..."

"Cristina, is that your sister's name?" Gavin asked.

"Yeah, she's a beautiful young girl." I answered. "I hope she hasn't gotten into more danger. When I find Alex... Ooooh it's going to be brutal."

"That's the same thing I said." A voice giggled from behind us.

"Tell me that's you Cristina, if not I'm going to lose it."

Cristina ran over to me and hugged me tightly.

"Yeah, it's me." She cooed.

I turned around and returned her hug.

"I'm so happy you're safe."

"As am I." Jill said from behind her.

Gavin's face lit up as her heard her voice. Jill, ran toward him and jumped onto his back, snuggling close to his body. Cristina and I broke away from our hugs and watched as the two relished in their reunion.

"Gavy!!!" She exclaimed. I'm so glad to be back with you!!"

"I am too. Jill where were you?"

"I'm sorry if I got your worried, I was sleeping in the vents, but I got lost in side of them. Then I found Alex's secret room in the back and that's how I met Cristina."

"I was beginning to blame myself, Jill. I thought that I wasn't protecting you enough. But now I knew that you're okay!!" Jill hopped off of Gavin's back and looked at me.

"So you're Ryan, huh?" She said with slight a tilt of her head.

"Yup, that's me." I chuckled. "It's nice to finally meet meet you Jillain. Gavin talks about you a lot."

"That's my Gavy! Always talking. Hahahaha!"

"Jillain, you're seven. You talk more than I do!" Gavin insisted.

"Alright you two, now that we're all accounted for, we have to find Alex and destroy this mansion. It seems to be invulnerable to any permanent damage though, so does any one know a way to get rid of that immunity?"

"Wait!" Cristina exclaimed. "I purposely let myself get taken to this place so I could tell you. There's some things in this place that need to be destroyed for it to die once and for all. Donna told me that they were a grandfather clock, a generator and something else that she couldn't remeber."

"Donna told you that? Hmm, normally I wouldn't trust her no matter what the situation is, but this is serious and she wouldn't joke about something like this. Looks like that's what we have to do."

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Hannah
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Hannah wrote a review · Sun May 25, 2014 7:34 am

Hey, dark!
It's been a long while since I've been around this story, so I have forgotten a lot of what was going on and had to go back and read my latest review. Imagine my surprised when I found this:

WHY DID I DO ALL OF THIS WITHOUT EVEN HAVING A LEGITIMATE PLAN FIRST!!??"


after my last review said "What's Alex's plan? He needs one if he's gonna be a good villain!" haha~ Looks like he didn't have one after all! Hilarious!

Yeah, yeah, we should definitely check it out."


Oh my gosh, I am loving the voice of Gavin. It's unique and it really brings out his personality clearly, so I can see him skittering along nervously as his voice matches his hyperactivity hehe.

YES and I'm so excited to see his wife and Cristina team up, and how awesomely they support each other and their strength, like Cristina kickin' right through that wall. Go, girls~

I like that you have a set of three things that they have to destroy to beat up Alex for good. It's actually a well-used convention of things like fairy tales, too, to have a set of three things or three actions repeated, that helps you remember the sequence of things. This also sets us up to anticipate the coming chapters, and be on the look out for the grandfather clock, the generator, and the last thing (which I think would be the rock that Alex was dealing with out by the ocean, right? thanks for letting the reader know before the characters~).

I seem to be pretty caught up, and it was easy to get back into the swing of things with a chapter where all four characters met up and introduced. I'm a little bit confused about what's going on with Cristina's transformations and stuff, but I think I'll be reminded of it as we figure out more information, right?

Anyways, excited and moving on~

PM me or reply to this review w/ questions or comments as always!

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heclgehog
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Just reading through this and a simple thing you could do to make this story stronger is find a way to get find of the time lapses. You have quite a few of them and they are never really a good thing in written stories. They make it seem like the reader is just jumping from one place to the next just to get to the plot with out much detail.

Another thing is that at the very even you have a total contradiction

"'Donna told you that? Hmm, normally I wouldn't trust her no matter what the situation is, but this is serious and she wouldn't joke about something like this. Looks like that's what we have to do.'"

If they wouldn't trust Donna 'no matter what' then why are they trusting her just because it is a serious situation? You need to reword that a bit better that way you aren't completely contradicting your self.

Another thing:

"'We could go up stairs. Yeah, yeah, definitely upstairs. That's the only place we can go anyway." He nodded."

I'm pretty sure that that is supposed to be a bit back and forth between Ryan and Gavin but you have written it so it looks like Gavin is asking a question, agreeing with himself, and then confirming his agreement with himself even though he has someone to talk to right beside him. This was very confusing but after reading it a few times I think I understand your intentions. You just need to read over your work a bit better before posting it that way you can take out or fix small mistakes like this.

Overall I thought this was alright. I like the original Pokemon a bit but I can't keep up with all of the new stuff that's coming out. This stories sounds like a fair representation of what could happen in the game or show. That is always a good thing to have in fan fiction. Keep writing :)

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kazza
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This is a difficult to understand story - I myself am a Pokemaniac, there's nothing I wouldn't do for it, having memorized most attack moves and all Pokémon up to Pokémon Black and White. Well, I had no idea the characters where Galvantulas, I had to reread the story to get a better picture - maybe next time you could put in more adjectives to describe how the characters look, and more emotion. I love the story plan. Brilliant. You have done well.

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Jonathan
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Hello dark. Here I am for some more reviews.

Here are spelling errors.

She got to her feet and stood there for a minute trying to remeber what had just happened.
Small mistake, you spelled Remember "Remeber".

He walke over to the fragile stairs and shot string from his mouth into each and every crevice of the stairs to hold them together like a powerful glue.
Another spelling mistake you spelled Walk wrong, Usted habla "Walke".

Yeah, yeah, definetly harmless.
now this sounds wrong you wrote Yeah do many times and you miss spelled Definitely wrong.

Gavin steeped out of the cold, ticklish flames to relax from the firery fun he just had. He backed up into the wall cracking it ever so slightly.
you miss spelled fiery.

I wish I could remeber what happened before I blacked out.
same as the one before and the same as the next one to you miss spelled Remember.

a generator and something else that she couldn't remeber.
As I said above, you spelled Remember wrong.

There.

I have already read this and it was very good it had a number of spelling mistakes your idea was good but some times you said "I" when you were in Cristina point of view and you meant Ryan.

Keep writing.

Good luck, I am sorry for this here but this was not a good review it was just spelling and it wasn't good.

~Jonathan~

About the "double yeah" thing. That's Gavin's habit. ZJust letting you know.

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dark
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Yup, your eyes are not deceiving you, the End of Alexander Shader is going to take three parts!!
Post Script: It took so long to get it out because of so little time, and many edits that had to be done. I almost had to rewrite the whole thing!!! :evil: Reviews are greatly appreciated.



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