Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
*This fanfic is underneath my folder titled “Marble Hornets fanfics”. Marble Hornets is an analog horror show on YouTube that ran from 2009-2014. You can still watch it. ^v^. It’s creepy but mostly sad. I like it. This fanfic is written as though one person made a video with just text in it directed at another person. There’s also mild spoilers over what happens in the show. The ship is between two characters from Marble Hornets, Tim and Jay. Tim and Jay are my profile pic! (Tim is in the plaid, Jay is in the hat). Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33”. Also, before we begin, there are two curse words I wrote! I normally don’t write curse words but I felt like it fit for the character writing this. Enjoy!*
Jay-
It’s been a few weeks since you were shot. I can still sometimes feel your head resting against my shoulder as we both drifted off into a sleep tinged with nightmares. I kept you in my house so this wouldn’t happen, but now that you’re gone…
It gets so much harder to live every day. It was already hard before, but now it’s made a million times worse with you gone. You were the person who pulled me back into reality, the person who was determined to find all the answers, the person who stayed with me even when it all came crashing down on me.
You loved me, Jay. Truly loved me in a way that I never thought would be possible for me.
Isn’t it funny, though? How this all started? You dug deep into the video tapes that you shouldn’t have and then you roped me back into the horrors that I was trying to escape my whole life, without any thought or regard of how I would feel about it.
At least, that’s what I thought when I punched you in the parking lot. When my whole heart began to shatter and pour out of my shaking lips, in a mix of fury and sadness. No tears came out, though. I didn’t cry.
Now that I’ve had time to think about it, I don’t think you knew. You plunged through the video tapes thinking it was just a movie, but no, you were haunted by the monster I’m trying so hard to escape. You wanted me because you knew that I was the only one who wasn’t going insane, who wasn’t letting that thing destroy my mind.
Oh, how wrong you were. We all went mad from the faceless demon, didn’t we? I just tried to push it away for me…but mostly for you. I wanted you to be okay. As we hopped from hotel to hotel, trying to figure out how to destroy the faceless monster that had seemed to appear in every other corner, I started to feel more connected with you. With each day that passed in, each new horror that appeared, I started telling you things about myself that I hadn’t ever told anyone else about before, not even Brian, and you listened. You didn’t see me as someone who could break apart into pieces at any second, you saw me as the answer to all of the fucked up shit that was going on in this life.
It was just the two of us, fighting for our lives. We placed our trust in one another and did our best to put an end to this. We tried to figure out how to stop it, but we couldn’t have time to figure out us.
Alex may have been the one with the gun, but I was the one who murdered you. If I had pushed you away harder, then you wouldn’t have stuck around. Then you would be alive and I would be dead. You had your whole life ahead of you, I have nothing. You didn’t deserve to die, I did. It’s all my fault. I didn’t do enough to protect you, Brian, Jessica, or Alex.
I think about what Alex said, about it being my fault for all this happening. A selfish part of me doesn’t want to believe him, but I know that he’s right. I didn’t know this would happen, but I should have distanced myself from everyone the second I started seeing the faceless man again. I shouldn’t have thought for one second that I would get to live a normal life, because after everything that happened, why would I deserve one?
I’m sorry, Jay. I failed you and everyone else. I couldn’t keep you alive, but I can end this. I can stop the sickness from spreading.
Your death was not in vain.
-Tim
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Please let me know in the comments if I should keep or get rid of the 16+ rating!
Whenever Tim and Jay hotel-hopped, they picked a room that had two separate beds, implying that they slept in their own beds.
But hey now%u2026what if they snuggled in one bed together%u2026and they just didn%u2019t record it%u2026(I like shipping them okay!)
Hello frenno, I'm back for another review.
There sure are a lot of your works in the green room! You definitely have a LOT of things to write about, that's for sure. Anyways, let's get started.
Okay, so full disclosure, I don’t really watch analog horror, so I might not catch all the little references or connections, but even so, this fanfic was really interesting!
From the first line, I can feel Tim’s voice pouring out, raw and desperate, and it immediately draws me in. His letter feels so real, like something he’s shouting into a void but hoping Jay will hear it somehow, and that made reading it kind of thrilling and heartbreaking all at once.
The way he mixes anger and sadness, confessing that he feels responsible for Jay’s death, is really intense. Every sentence makes you feel like you are there with him, trapped in the aftermath of horror and loss, and I loved how messy and human his emotions are.
Even though I don’t know all the Marble Hornets lore, I could still follow the thread of their relationship, and it was so easy to understand why Tim feels this way. It's crazy realizing that he was the one who hurt Jay, because it’s such a twist on the usual “heroic survivor” trope. The combination of horror, heartbreak, and deep personal connection is very intense. I very like!
If I were to offer a tiny suggestion, it might be to include a small pause or two between some of the heavier paragraphs, just to give the reader a second to breathe and feel the weight of what Tim is saying before the next emotional punch. Also, maybe a little hint of the faceless monster lurking or some eerie imagery could bring the horror aspect just a touch closer to the forefront, though honestly, the story works perfectly as it is because the emotional stakes are already so high. Overall, this piece is heartbreaking, immersive, and incredibly well done. Also I'm not a huge fan of cursing, but it does well to add to the atmosphere of the story!
yosh out-
I am so glad you enjoyed this and please consider watching the show because it%u2019s soo good!!!
Hello, My Friend!
Here to finally complete this review, it's me Raven! Let's dive right in, shall we?
I love the way you wrote this. It feels like the kind of letter you would pick up in the later stages of a horror game--the one that gives you that final piece of tragic, heavy exposition. I'm honestly amazed that this isn't one of your original characters; you did a great job of catching that very personal, emotional perspective of Tim. Beautiful!
As far as technical recommendations go, I have none! It wouldn't be too fair of me to review based on context anyway, since I'm still getting caught up with Marble Hornets. I do feel like I get the idea of what is/has happened regardless though, and I couldn't spot any typos or the like. Good work!
As to your question about the rating, the violence is pretty tame, at least from my perspective. I would say it's a solid PG-13 in that regard. But on account of there being some hard language drops (f-bombs and such), I think 16+ is fair.
As for favorite moments, one of them was definitely this:
This is just so beautiful; I love how you blend in these emotions. It moves the plot forward without separating it from the intensity of the moment, and the descriptions are just so powerful! Ah, love it!
I love how you showed the dynamic between Jay and Tim here. Again, I'm amazed these aren't your own characters, they're written so well lol. And that line about Alex being the one with the gun, but Tim feeling like it's his fault, it just really brought out that sense of guilt he must be carrying.
Also loved the references to the "faceless man" to keep the creep factor in this story.
Overall, that was amazingly written, very well done!
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"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”
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I%u2019m so glad you enjoyed this!
Another Marble Hornets fanfic thing I made! “Entry despair”
Oh, awesome!! I%u2019ll check it out soon!
Okay! :>