Knight r4 returning for another review, ccw! I certainly hope this helps you. The title of this poem caught my eye and since you are new to YWS I thought that I would give you another review. Hey, it is even Christmas in July. Well it will be in less than three hours at any rate.
Again I noticed that you didn't have any punctuation aside from a few apostrophe's. It isn't a big deal in one sense. I even have trouble with it. And personally find it kind of annoying. However that doesn't mean it isn't important. Punctuation Rant Ends.
Okie-dokie...what else do I have to say? I liked the theme of tense changes! Good job on that end of things! The second line of the third stanza was a little confusing to me. I understand what you mean but I thought it didn't really line up with the rest of the poem.
I was also glad to see that this was a little bit longer than the first poem I tackled. (Knights of the Green Room terminology). I also like the fact that your poems actually make sense, unlike some poems I have read.
In light of the fact that I don't like romance or poetry a ton I thought that this was a good poem. Well I think that is all that I have to say aside from, HAPPY WRITING!!! Goes of to review another of your poems
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