Sam (The Boy With The Pretty Brown Eyes)

One grammatical mistake- your smileS make me (or) your smile makeS me.

Besides that, nice, simple, sweet poem. It sweetly describes how a crush makes you feel.

Your words were simple but meaningful (To quote Sarah) And had a large impact with basic words. The flow was good, the story nice. And I liked the last part. 'But with you I am free' Very sweet. You almost got me in love with the boy with the pretty brown eyes.

7.8/10

Hello, there, Sarah here to review for ya! I'm going to keep this short and plain and well, just cut straight to the chase. Seeing as there wasn't much text to judge you on, this shouldn't take long.

Your words are simple but meaningful. Using short, easy words is what gives the poem a nice flow, and the simplicity makes it seem oh, so childish. But don't take that the wrong way! Being childish is what makes it such an adorable poem. As for anything to nitpick on, I think a better and more precise use of punctuation would be in your best bet, otherwise, it would just make your poem seem too short and rather boring. But then again, who would find this boring? XD

I'm sure if your Sam were to see this now, his affection for you would pour out like a bucket of water because this is the sweetest love poem I've read in a while. You have a strong writing style that draws the reader's attention and I think that's awesome!

Keep up the good work!

Knight r4 here for another review cw. Man alive! You write a ton of poems! I can barely keep up with them all! Oh well! As I KotGR (Knight of the Green Room) member, I consider it my duty (and honor) to clear all works who dare to enter out. Okay the charade is over. You know what that means! It is time for be to start reviewing this poem.

Aside from the lack of punctuation I thought that this was a fabulous work I thought you did a good job of conveying the emotion of the character in this poem (even if it is romantic) and I like your description too! (I can see that you are sure on a roll between writing poems and doing reviews). You make this scene seem so...oh what's the word...surreal (even though it is perfectly realistic.

I noticed that you never mentioned the boy's name in the poem though you do in the title. I am not sure if this was on purpose for effect, intentional because you couldn't find a good place for him, or just a mistake that you overlooked/you didn't even think about it. I just thought I would mention it since it sort of stuck out to me.

Overall, as you can tell, I enjoyed reading this poem and look forward to reading more of your writing. Just remember to use punctuation, especially end marks. Note: I did see that you used a couple of commas. but you still need to have end marks and other things like that. Well I think that, that is just about all I wanted to point out. Happy Writting!!! I look forward to reading more of your poetry!!!