Young Writers Society

CONGRATULATIONS ON THIS MASTERPIECE!!!!!!
you have written a phenomenal poem that exceeds all the expectations of any romantic poet ....
You have restored my faith in true love and your poem is heart touching and soothing to read ....
The depth of emotions and feelings associated with this poem is truly brilliant.... Your romantic imaginations along with exemplary writing skills have produced a perfect poem that can be read thousands of times by anyone with a young heart and deep desire for finding their soul mates......
though i might want to point out that this is an ideal case and can rarely happen in real life...

keep smiling and keep writing!!!!!!

This was really nice to read! It feels sincere, sweet, and genuine. It kinda reminds me of the few times where I would fantasize about whoever my future man was.

To the girl I haven't met.

I noticed you immediately
I had to muster up the guts
To put my arm around your shoulder
You lit up at my touch

A dance, and your eyes are all I see
Your smile makes me think
That you might just be the best thing
That's ever happened to me

Don't shy away from connection
I don't want to lose this
Let the walls around your heart
Fall for me, let me in

I'll cry when I hear about your trauma
I'll hold your hand
Everything you have been through
I try to understand

You say I'm your first love
Then when did you learn to kiss
A picnic under the stars
Something I know I'll never forget

You haven't read since you met me
It's almost like
This life is better than fantasy
As long as you're mine

This was a cute poem that left me with a smile on my face, well done

Maybe it's just me not understanding, but i don't really get the lines "Do you get tongue-tied when I'm not there /and feel braver when i'm away?" If you're away, you're also not there, right?

Regardless, i think the rhyme scheme's rlly solid and the tone of the poem fits well with what it's about - I can picture this poem being read at the start of a feel-good romcom or something, maybe a teen show. It's really sweet and I'll make sure to check out any other writing you do, i loved this, thanks for sharing

Hello averyismediocre! Incoming review!

Ah yes, expectations for our dream person that are probably too high and no one will ever reach because books tainted our sense of "perfect." Well with that said I'm going to review your work stanza by stanza.

Do you smile when I turn around?

Do you miss me when I leave the room?

Are you thinking about me day and night,

And are your feelings for me true?

Do you think about the color of my eyes

And wonder if they're blue or grey?

Do you get tongue tied when I'm not there

And feel braver when I'm away?

Do you write me little notes each day?

Do you memorize my favorite drink?

Are you excited every time I say hi,

And are you scared of what I think?

Do you like to tell me funny jokes

And grin when you hear my laugh?

Do you notice when I struggle in school

And try to help me with my math?

To the boy that I haven't met yet:

I know it seems I expect a lot,

But all I've ever known are books

And cliches are all I've got.

But if you truly love me,

Just know I love you too.

And when the time comes for us to meet,

I hope it's me you pursue.

Hi there, Ellie-Mae here for a quick review!

Wishing you a happy day/evening/morning/night/whatever is applicable to your part of the world! First off, please remember that my reviews are my own opinions I’ll give honest feedback, but nothing at all is intended to hurt or discourage you in any way at all! <3 So, without waiting any longer, let’s get right into it and digest the spectabulous piece of literary work!

This was so lovely to read I am personally a fan of poetic pieces that focus on asking questions, which out necessarily receiving answers. The aspect of love and drama compliments this very well and makes it ever so enjoyable to read. Good job!

Ellie-Mae