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dream-talk

by alliyah



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Mon Jan 13, 2020 5:29 pm
imaginer2018 wrote a review...



Hi alliyah!

This poem really captured the confusion and randomness of dreams. It doesn't make sense, but there's a certain charm to it. I like how the topics jump from one thing to another, but still retain the overall theme.

The stanzas contrast, yet shared similarities with each other. They are structured to collaborate with the theme of the poem, which works out very nicely when reading it.

My favorite verse is this:

{so for now please be content
with land-trapped birds and words that don't quite fit}


It reminds me of Alice in Wonderland.

This is a beautifully written poem; wonderful job.
Athena




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Mon Jan 13, 2020 4:21 am
dahlia58 wrote a review...



This poem was a bit confusing to read, in a good way. It really felt like I was seeing someone's dream. Perhaps this is only because I'm not a good poetry reader...But most of the verses seemed to make no sense on purpose. From lighting to ocean to haze, the topics seem to jump randomly from one to another. I especially liked the eighth stanza (from "but I" to "lungs"). It sounded really powerful to me.

Please keep writing, and happy New Year^^





Life is about losing everything.
— Isabel Allende