This was a really great poem. I liked the word choice, and the figurative language, and the overall poem itself. There are two things I'd like to point out, however.
First of all, where you wrote 'err' you were going for error.
Second, At the start, there was no punctuation, zip, zero, other zero words. But throughout the rest of the poem, you go back to it, except the area where you forgot to put a coma behind the but.
Overall, this poem was great, and the things above are just little nitpicks that needed to be pointed out. Happy Review Day!
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