Young Writers Society

Hi, here to leave a superrr short review!

I really like this poem. It's an accurate depiction of how great dads sacrifice so much for us just because they love us and want to see us succeed. Sometimes, they can be a bit tough, but that push is all we need to be better. I remembered my dad with this poem, because he does the same thing for me.

Overall, this is a wonderful poem! It shows how much a person (in this case our dads) can have an effect on our growth and improvement.

This is alpacaboss, signing off

Hello! This is a random weirdo here to review.

It's so sweet that you made a poem for your dad for father's day! (I still gotta do that...) Overall, this was a very interesting (but sadly short) poem! Only thing I should mention is I'm not sure where this takes place? (Unless it's metaphorical or intentionally vague on where this is, could you tell me?)

Anyway, on with the review!

The window of opportunity was wide enough, but
I was too far away to see the view.

What's an expression for fear?

His tall shadow enveloped me from behind. Calloused
hands squeezed my shoulders.
Eat more, he said. Be as strong as your heart, as quick as your brain.
He pushed me toward the window of opportunity.

I am my own worst enemy.

Fear the parasite infecting your courage. Take this opportunity and make your future.

My toes touch the edge. I grip the sides, fingers burning white.
But my strong, silent father stands firm. His eyes
hold the fire of a thousand suns.

He's one of my biggest supporters. He wants to best for me.
I step off.

Hello, this is Ina aka loveissourgrapes and I am here to give you a little review/comment about your poem. Happy Father's Day to your dad too c:

This poem tells me that father's always reassure their children. No matter how stubborn, and annoying their child could especially the coming of age ones. Because their children may think of themselves as a monster, a failure, but to a their father, they are a blessing, and the most loveable human being on earth.

My dad's not tall but he is a kind and supportive person. Over all, your poem was great. I love reading stuff that are relatable and about both parents or both. Have a nice day/night!