officials warn the impending arrival
invading our lives,
turning the world upside down.
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virus
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masks became the new style
covid became the new fear.
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six feet away at all times
lest we waltz with the virus
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until Death takes us by the hand
and Misery -the parasite-
finds another host.
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Someone in the year 2063 is going to read this and then ask their grandparents if this is really what it was like.
This is clearly about Covid-19 in the same way A Tale of Two Cities is about the war between France and Britain.
Part of me dose think it this poem is having trouble balancing a poetic tone with the REAL LIFE SUBJECT.
Theirs also the fact that since we have lived with Covid for over a year this may not hit us as hard.
But I might be judging this work too harshly.
Something tells me Covid is an ongoing theme in your work.
I might also be unfairly comparing your style to my style.
Bottom line your doing good, but i feel like this could be a little more haunting.
Hey Valkyria! You're doin great with the tagbook! And I'm here with a review for you.
I think both these lines go hand-in-hand. We have to wear our masks to minimize the spread because we're scared of getting sick. But that fear is long-lived for many, including myself. I don't think I'm going out without a mask for years after all this happens.Ah yes, covid. It's the reason for so much of our living habits these days. And it's nice to see your view. Everyone's view is different and now I'll dive into the poem.
I think my favourite stanza here is
I also love this stanza It just gives me an image of an Victorian ball and I need to stay 6 feet away from Sir 'Rona or else he'll want to dance with me. It's comical but there's a sense of tension that I can't some near him. It's really cool!
I have a few critiques here. I think your title could have been more related to the poem itself. Perhaps replacing "Belief" with "Fear." Not too many people have been believing more than in fear. The only other one I had was about capitalization. You don't use capitalization except for the words "Death" and "Misery." They aren't at the beginning of any lines. If you intended for them to be words that are supposed to stand out, I would recommend making then bold or, more subtly, italic.
But that's all I have for today! I hope you found some of this helpful. I haven't seen too many Covid themed poems in 2021 and I'm glad I've seen another perspective! Have a nice day! Anyway byeeeeeeeee<33
Hi Valkyria,
Mailice here with a short review!
The title alone is a poetic masterpiece and I like how it contrasts with the poem itself and how ambiguous it is when you read the text and the interpretation starts rattling around in your head.
I also like how you manage to give a kind of "once upon a time" moment with the title, as if the whole pandemic was already long over and you're looking back on that time at an old age. At the same time, I think it can also refer to the first time after the pandemic hit, when the whole population still had faith and that broke down more and more as the politicians stretched the curfews like chewing gum.
But now to the poem itself. I like the way you divide it into different "stanzas", creating a kind of "timeline", as if you wanted to reconstruct everything that happened. I like the beginning because it starts with a "great power" warning the little people and then you just come up with the result "virus". I feel like the poem here is expressing that the politicians haven't done enough to warn the people.
I like the connection between the masks becoming a new style and the fear of the covid. It already shows a definite change that has been brought about and how quickly that could happen.
My highlight will probably be the second to last verse.
There is something painful and lamenting in these lines and yet also something sarcastic that I can't interpret. It sounds like trying to do something that has been forbidden by your parents but you are tempted to do it anyway. (That feeling of getting caught.)
I like how the end opens up and it comes with the final ending, the thing that was warned about in the first stanza that you have to watch out for. I like here how the "turning the world upside down" from the first stanza can relate to this, in that it can be interpreted as death / grave or coffin.
The only criticism I have (where I think it's more me) is the fact that the poem can be read in two ways; firstly those who see the virus as something scary and you need to protect the population from it, but also in a satirical version of a denier who wants to use it to show how quickly politicians can turn democracies into dictatorships. But maybe I just watch too much news.
In summary, it was an interesting presentation with some successful contrasts and metaphors.
Have fun writing!
Mailice.
Use your title as a poem itself. With this idea already written.
I liked this ,very timely !