Heat of Heroism

I really like the lucid, light-headed feeling of the poem. The emphasis added by the italics is especially fitting. Though I can't exactly make sense of what is going on in the poem, I suppose that that's part of the dreamy illusion you intended to paint. The stanza "They ruined my fables/ Shattered my stables/ Now I know who I am" was exceptional. It was simple, to the point, and haunting-- reminds me of Poe! Good job, I really enjoyed puzzling over this.

This poem kind of confused me... but I liked it anyways! Haha I enjoy reading things that make me think more so that's always a good thing to have! Good job on the poem, the only thing I would suggest is to make the topic more understanding just to give a better understanding to your readers. I also like the tone and mood of this poem as well, it's very interesting. I look forward to reading more from you! Good job!

HEY! I really enjoyed reading your poem primarily because it created a whole bunch of thoughts in the back of my mind. Every thing that I thought about while reading this poem related to me. I had everything from events that took place throughout my life to quotes that I had heard before and really enjoyed. This is one of those poems that can bring across a wide variety of morals and messages and everything that the readers sees and thinks while reading it, entirely depends on there personality because this is a topic that relates to everyone. ANYWAYS, here I go blabbing on and on again. You're probably bored so I will be concise. LOVED IT! Loved pretty much everything about it and as for flaws........ NONE! Please keep writing! I really want to read more of your work

I also, like the other reviewer have... no idea what this poem is about! But as your description of it suggests, maybe it's supposed to be sort of interpretive. I feel like it has sort of an Odyssey sort of mythology feel, with the cyclops, and the bumbling monster at the beginning, and then contrasting a very fragile and scared creature in the 2nd to last stanza. I also see the power struggle, in this poem you show how sometimes you have to let go of your power of others to achieve the power of yourself.

I have to say, as an overall idea I really like this sort of abstract poem, I've always wanted to write something like that more abstract than concrete, I think it's the nobelest form of poetry in my opinion, because anyone can make sense from something logical, but it takes a true artist to make something un-logical that people can find sense in. And I think you're on the road to that.

So onto my suggestions!
You do a great job, of bringing the similar theme of burning, and kind of an old sort of legend feel when you talk about the sun and stables throughout the poem, but I think it could be more. I really think this all needs to be extended I think the contrast you have is really great, but I think you can develop it more, by adding some figurative language, and add a few more exciting, unique adjectives.

Only problem as far as spelling that I saw was in this line: "Being fearless costs to much" 'to' should be "too". I think in the line before that one you might have meant "sensitive" instead of "sensible"..

Thank you for posting, and I hope you post a lot more like this! Good luck in all of your future writing!
~aliyah~

I really liked your poem.

It kind of leaves the reader to think about it anyway they want to.

I know thats the point of the whole thing but it would be better if you added a little bit more explanation.

I loved the part where it's like

"They ruined my fables
Shattered my stables
Now I know who I am."

I think it's really smart, I don't know why...

okay I'm not good at reviewing but i love your poem, thats all!

Wow! Very interesting poem. I liked it a lot.
I do have to ask a question.

What is this poem..about exactly?

It sounds like perhaps it was about the Colorado burning..? I am not completely sure, but that tis my guess.
I am not very good at reviews, but I can say that you did an excellent job with words, intriguing and unusual. Perhaps you.. and maybe its me, could add a bit more explanation, just a little?
Thank you for the read! I liked it a lot! And its probably just my sense of not being able to understand. In that case, please ignore my stupidity.

Little Storm Writer, GG <3