Ye olde tales tell of fairies
their songs ever so sweet
in homely forest dwellings
their company's a treat
They are manic
Hardly hinged
Ever frantic
Panic tinged
Life's every moment
they squeeze and they pry
desperate for joy
they may find inside
I am a pixie
someone's manic dream boy
I prize to be won
I will share my joy
A pixie's a thing
to trap in a jar
to hold extra tight
and push way too far
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I love this poem... I mean REALLY love this poem! The fairytale writing style and the whimsical flow compliment each other really well. Also, I love how you write about a manic dream boy when we only ever really hear about manic pixie dream girls. But from the way I understand it, you are very literal with the pixie description. I feel like you could extend this into a book or even ashort story. I would love to know more about the manic dream boy and the emotions he's feeling.
I hope you keep writing!
- Poetry Misfit
Thanks for the review!
Lovely poem! It sounded just like a children’s fairytale.The fact that the poem says that pixies can be broken,shared and put into jars,says what the narrator thinks about pixies.Maybe,pixies are human,like us and they just want to be loved,to share their love with others,no matter what.After all,what is the use of joy and magic if it can’t be shared? I hope you have a wonderful day/night.
Hey there! I'm here to review your poem!
Let's dive right into it, shall we?
This stanza actually surprised me. Whenever I see old books about the Fae, or hear old people tell stories of them, the Fae tend to be evil, and the stories dark and twisted. So, yeah, this was just really surprising. There must be some good stories out there that I don't know.
Okay, apparently for some reason I read this part like a rap and I don't know why. Anyway, time for the actual review part of this. I guess since I read it like a rap, it has a beat to it and that tends to be a good thing in poetry, so great job on that.
All right, so, this stanza makes me think about the Fae children as changelings, trying to make the most out of their horrible situation and find joy in their human family. So, yeah, awesome job on imagery. People reading poems tend to enjoy being able to picture what's going on, so that was important.
I really liked the emphasis on "will" in this stanza. It gives some support on the idea that pixies strive to be with company, and with good company, as stated above. It's good to keep supporting ideas throughout a piece, so good job on that.
Okay, hold on. This is confusing me a bit. If the company traps the pixies, than why would the pixies strive to be with them? So, yeah, this is kinda stumping me, but making the reader have a bunch of questions is a good ending, I think. I mean, lots of famous poets do that, so I guess it's a good thing. Sorry this section wasn't too helpful.
Overall, the grammar was really good, so it doesn't distract the reader from the actual story. Great job on that!
Thanks for reading, and have a good day/night!
-Quinn
Ye olde tales tell of fairies
their songs ever so sweet
in homely forest dwellings
their company's a treat
I got an old-time feel from this section. Almost like a grandparent/parent talking to their grandkids/kids.
They are manic
Hardly hinged
Ever frantic
Panic tinged
Okay, it seems like the grandparent/parent is trying to warn the child.
I am a pixie
someone's manic dream boy
I prize to be won
I will share my joy
Perhaps the grandparent/parent is speaking in a metaphor?
A pixie's a thing
to trap in a jar
to hold extra tight
and push way too far
It seems like pixies are highly sought after.
Overall: Good job!
Thanks for the review!