Teach Me (first ever piece of poetry!)

by Sureal

Published November 27, 2005

In Rubbish Poetry

Teach Me

Poetry has always escaped me,
Rhyme and imagery chucked out the window,
Structure and meaning all but trampled and mushed,
Emotions and insight trodden under my foot and crushed.

Even this is getting me no where,
But everyone has to start at some point,
And so I’m telling you – your help is needed,
Really you have to tell me, I’ve cried for it, pleaded.

I’ve stood and bitched at the impossibility,
Now it’s time to sit and learn from those who know,
Please please – teach me how to do so, instruct me, tell me,
Before I brawl and scream, tell me… how the hell do you write poetry?

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Muse
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Muse wrote a review Review · Nov 29, 2005

how do you write poetry....hmm.
Anyway, good first attempt. Its really good. But i agree with Snoink, i guess the rhyming did seem a bit forced. I cant use rhyme to save myself, so im not exactly one to comment on that though. So yeaah..tis good work :D :D

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Angel17
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Angel17 commented Comment · Nov 29, 2005

I loved your ending the most!!! Good poem :D

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Sureal
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Sureal commented Comment · Nov 29, 2005

Why do people like it? Personally, I think it's terrible.

Anyway Snoink, I'll check out that artical :).

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Superfreakazoid
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Superfreakazoid commented Comment · Nov 28, 2005

Hee, clever. I like the format you used.

thegirlwhofateloves commented Comment · Nov 28, 2005

I liked it. Typical frustration of the artiste!!! lol :wink:

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Snoink
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Snoink wrote a review Review · Nov 28, 2005

LOL!

Well, we are the blind leading the blind. ;)

Your rhyming scheme is very forced. :P I wrote a little article on structured poetry here: http://www.ver2.biz/snoink/kn/writing/5.php

But interesting idea! I love poetry that hates poetry. :)



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