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deep sink(ing) thoughts

by Spearmint, EllieMae


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a deep sink is one of the most wonderful things to be.
overlooked, underappreciated, yet always there.
shining softly despite layers of grime.
never overflowing, holding all the dirty plates and leftover scraps.
never satisfied with themself, because there is always more
cleaning to be done and mistakes to melt away.
in their endless depth of warmth, consolation is a prize given freely,
until their water grows cold.

deep sink, you are more important than you know.
perhaps it is only you keeping this household running,
swallowing the dirt and the mess and allowing life to go on.
you deserve the world. you deserve to be seen.
deep sink, you may be the only of your kind,
but there is something incredibly marvelous about your mind.
because every piece of you seeks to accomplish gentle kindness
and you sacrifice for others, despite the all-consuming hopelessness.

one day, i hope you can use your powers on yourself.
using some soap and water for yourself is not an act of selfishness.
it is okay to overflow, okay to clog up sometimes, okay to be unfinished.
recognize your light.
and for one moment, i pray you can accept to be alone,
because the strength you have acquired stretches so much further than the walls of this home,
the stains you carry, buried away, are what make you free,
because you are bold, you are powerful, and you are me. 


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gruzinkerbell wrote a review...



Hey, it's Serrurie, here to leave a review! Let's dive in:

The Good Stuff
- Never would I have thought I could feel sympathetic for a sink. I mean, really? A sink? It's the mark of a true poet to be able to dive into human emotions, and the mark of a master to explore the beauty of emotions with something unexpected. You, friends, did something very unexpected. It's innovative! And beautiful.
- The theme of sacrifice in this poem is beautiful and prominent. It helps cast a more serious tone on something that most people would probably find humourous.
- Now I am not only sympathetic for a sink, but RELATING to it? I love how the end ties up with the message 'it's ok to clean yourself up sometimes, scars make you stronger,' type of vibes. Forget what I said about this being innovative. It's a beautiful, soulful masterpiece that I enjoy a lot.

Room For Improvement
- I don't think all of your rhyme schemes make sense. Some of them are just a bit off. I think this is mainly highlighted when you make the perfect rhyme scheme and you realize that it's standalone, like here:

deep sink, you may be the only of your kind,
but there is something incredibly marvelous about your mind.


I only notice rhyme schemes like this going into the second stanza. I would just suggest rhyming a bit more to keep things consistent in the first stanza.

Overall Opinion
- This was a great poem! I felt a good amount of emotion while reading it, and I think it was very creative. I have no clue what being a deep sink enthusiast is, but I will gladly join you both in being one.

Happy writing, and have a blessed day!

Serrurie

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Spearmint says...


Tagging @EllieMae so she can see this lovely review too!! Thank you, Serrurie! :D
Never would I have thought I could feel sympathetic for a sink. I mean, really? A sink? It's the mark of a true poet to be able to dive into human emotions, and the mark of a master to explore the beauty of emotions with something unexpected. You, friends, did something very unexpected. It's innovative! And beautiful.

Ahhhh this is such high praise <3 Glad to hear of your newfound empathy for sinks! ;D
I only notice rhyme schemes like this going into the second stanza. I would just suggest rhyming a bit more to keep things consistent in the first stanza.

Good suggestion! If we revise this, having a consistent rhyme scheme is def a thing I'd want to do :3
I have no clue what being a deep sink enthusiast is, but I will gladly join you both in being one.

Welcome!! =P
Thanks again! <3



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Hello, @Spearmint and @EllieMae (tagging you both so Ellie gets notified)

Wist here to review some classic deep deep sink poetry. I love that the deep sink gets some love this time after the angst we wrote it into last time. Love your deep sinks, people. Deep sinks are a true wonder of the world, and I love how this poem explores that. Too many take out their anger of needing to wash dishes on the poor sink who didn't make the dishes dirty, but only ever helps you clean them. We all need a reminder of how much better life is with a deep sink in our lives. Everyone asks "Why is the sink full" and not "How is the sink doing being so full?" Thank you for asking that question today. With that said, let's dive into the poem.

one day, i hope you can use your powers on yourself.
using some soap and water for yourself is not an act of selfishness.
it is okay to overflow, okay to clog up sometimes, okay to be unfinished.

I know this poem is meant to be mostly joking, but these lines genuinely made me want to cry. They're so inspiring and sweet. It can be so hard to remember to do things for yourself and not live for everyone all of the time. Deep sinks deserve to hear this message and clean themselves, but people deserve to take time for themselves too. I hope the two of you keep that in mind, too <33

Overall, it's a great addition to the deep sink collection and has some advice for the people who aren't deep sinks in your life. I'll remember to scrub my deep sink whenever it loses its shine now. Thanks for publishing; I enjoyed reading.

Happy Writing!
Wist




Spearmint says...


Hi Wist, thanks for the review!!
I love that the deep sink gets some love this time after the angst we wrote it into last time.

LOL yes :3
It can be so hard to remember to do things for yourself and not live for everyone all of the time.

You captured the sentiment exactly <33
I'll remember to scrub my deep sink whenever it loses its shine now.

Ahh I am so happy to hear that :'D
Thank you for the kind review! <3




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