Young Writers Society

HELLO DEAR FRIEND FROM TOMATO LAND <3 okay this is such an interesting concept of a poem, and I'd love to take a look at this and leave a few thoughts! c: this review probably won't be very long as I don't think I have much to say, so I hope that's all right with you :)

I really love the concept of a palindrome poem!! That's such a neat idea, and it makes the poem feel like a puzzle. I love when poems aren't very straightforward, and you have to use your brain to piece information together cx Like here, it was fun to read the line backwards and forwards and get the same result

Something that I also found neat in the poem was this line

hope pop o pep oh

I read it as sound words in my head, like onomatopoeia, and I it added a little fun and flair into the poem for me! This poem overall feels very playful since it's almost like a game, so I thought that was a neat line to add to sort of add to that effect c:

I do have some suggestions/some things for you to think about or consider! I think this was meant to be more of a fun, experimental poem, but if you're looking to develop this into something more, I hope these comments will be helpful for you! ^_^ (if this was just meant to be something new and fun to try, you can just ignore these couple of points! they are, after all, just suggestions if you want them <3)

1.) I am a bit confused on how all of these lines connect. How does each palindrome relate to the next? Is there an overall message here / am I missing something? Because right now, the lines doesn't really string together; they all seem a bit random and disconnected, and I'm missing the overall theme or message of this poem. Is there something you're trying to say with the idea that these lines can be read forwards or backwards? Perhaps there's an extended metaphor you could create with that idea? I'm just missing cohesiveness and a purpose to these lines.

2.) Something that could potentially be a solution to my first point is to not make the poem a full on palindrome, but to throw in palindromes here and there while advancing a theme or a message with "regular poetry" (that's not a good term to use, but I can't think of anything else cx) I do think that if you didn't make the poem fully made of palindromes, it might be a lot easier to have a central idea, and the lines would also be more easily connected.

3.) Also, I'm not really sure about the meaning or purpose of some of the lines xD For example

aria air a

(I really hope I'm not being dumb, but I could very well be missing something xD) What does this line really mean? Does it relate to any of your other liens? Or was it just kinda thrown in there for the purpose of including palindromes? I just think some of the lines are a bit hard to interpret or understand by themselves. Just a thought for you! ^_^

And that's all I really got for you! I do hope that some of these thoughts might prove useful to you in some way <3 Overall, I super enjoyed the concept of this poem! It's such a fun and new idea! ^_^ It's always really exciting to see poets play with poetry and see what kind of new heights they can take it to. Experimental poetry is a really fun thing to play with, and I love what you're exploring c: I hope to read more from you soon, and I hope this helped! <33