I Wish This Was A Goodbye

wow this was really good! i give you props for expressing your feelings really good. it fell like i was you pretty creepy but good. In your next work i say you can rhyme more? but other than that i enjoyed it, it is something i can really relate to and i really liked it. Hope ican see more of your work.

I hate goodbyes too mostly when its someone i care about or love. It hurts so much but is sometimes the best thing to do. I love the ending where you wrote "I don't want to say goodbye. I don't want to let go. But even I cannot stop the world From spinning the night into day. I pray I will never have to say goodbye" It describes me so much and how i be feeling.

This was simply amazing. Reading through it I didn't see any mistakes that jumped out at me. The flow of it was beautiful and feeling.. struck my heart. I think this a poem that a lot of people can relate to, and you wrote it wonderfully. You have so much feeling in it, so much imagery. Even though the painted scene was quite painful, it still took my breath away with its beauty. Splendid. Well done. Please, please, keep writing. You're a mastermind.

This wasn't much of review, as it was me complimenting your work, but you simply left me with nothing to critique on. Again, well done.

~AngelMarie

Hello there, here I am for a review or with a review for you I really hope it helps.

OK you did really good here you introduced the person just inf to get some felling for them, it almost mad me cry.

Your poetry was really good and so was your spelling grammar and punctuation at-least I could not find the least problem with any of it.

Good work I hope we meet again you did really good here.

Keep writing and good luck.

Until later good bye.

~Jon~

Hey Rarity, StoryWeaver here to review! So I tend to warn people before I review anything involving poetry or romance; seeing as this just so happens to encompass both, I'll tell you that this review will likely be a harsh one, but only out of my sincere desire to help. :]


Anyway, my problem with this poem is the same that I have with most love poems; it is cliche, the metaphors are weak, and the tone is verging on whiny or moping. If you are going to write about love you have to make it authentic, unique, and your own. Nothing is more important in a love poem than an implied, in-depth identity.

As I said, I review love poems harshly. This isn't meant to be offensive and honestly, this poem is far from the worst I've seen. Just remember to go beyond the typical boundaries of angst-ridden love poems and truly find a way to put your own spin on this concept.

Keep writing, and best wishes. xxx