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I'm not usually a big fan of poetry, but I am rather fond of this poem! It's safe, warm, and inviting. Almost like a parent to their child, or from one lover to the other. It's a very nice poem. It's short and to the point. I like it. Very nicely done. Keep writing.
-Fire
I LOVE THIS. its so pretty and safe. it reminds me of how someone would truely love someone else like in the movies! and great rymes. amazing peice keep up the good work
This is a very nice poem, and it flows rather well except in a few areas.
"I won't let the demons lead you astray"
This line doesn't quite match up to the others. I think that "I won't let demons lead you astray" flows a bit better.
"The night will soon be over and gone."
This line has the same problem. It contains an extra syllable. Try making it "The night will soon be over, gone." In my opinion, that flows a bit better.
Otherwise, i think this poem is simply perfect, and it really convey's the message well.
Keep writing!
~Sharitm2
thats a really sweet poem. only one thing...you rhymed the first two stanzas, but the last one rhyme as well, maybe that could be edited. but overall thats really grat
