This is amazing CandyWizard! I totally relate to this poem.
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I don't Like thisĀ
Some people
hate rhymes, others despise their absence
Some people hate it when I try to use various accents
But if there is one thing that irritates me the most
It's when people "Like" their own comments and posts
Good work here! Totally relatable! The shortness of this piece really makes it effective. It is rather random and choppy in its thought process, although I believe you did that purposefully. Punctuation at the end of your lines would make this piece more grammatically stable though. Great work! Keep it up!
groganbabygirl
Hey CandyWizard, TS here reviewing.
I appreciate what you did here and think that it is a little funny, but I think it could be a lot better. In saying that, if you made it more complex then it might not have thirty-seven likes, since it's because this is so simple that it's nice. But if it were me I wouldn't be totally satisfied with the piece.
I just think it's so random and the lines aren't connected; I have no problem being thrown into a person's world, completely foreign, but here it's just so strange. It's like if a stranger came to you on the street and said "I don't like pineapple." It's just like... okay. But maybe if you added in a little more... I don't mean to ruin the simplicity, I just don't like the simplicity :')
I'm sorry if you don't like my advice, but at least it's an honest opinion I just think you should try to add some more. Sorry i couldn't offer much more either, short piece. Short and sweet. You know how to work that golden star! Something I'm not great at, so kudos on that
Yours in ink,
TS.
Hey, candy...it's the first time I am reading your writing.
That's great! The greatest! Honesty is flowing through it. To point out a very common and not so good characteristic of human beings in such a poetic way is something that only a genius can do...
I loved it, liked it.. Laughed a lot after reading it. I realized that you had to go through quite a lot of "pera" ( trouble, mendokusai etc. in Bangla) and wrote it..
I tell you, your "pera" feeling did end up in something good.
I want more of your writing like this one..
XD
But, Wizi, to be really honest with you, I was thinking of doing that lately (liking my own stuff ) But now when you've written this,
THAT IS A COMPLETE NO-NO!
Oh my goodness this was great! Short, sweet and to the point. This is also a pet peeve of mine, you posted it, you obviously like it right?
This is by far my favorite half of the poem. It just SOUNDS so irritated and a little sardonic. Very well done and sorry for the short review!But if there is one thing that irritates me the most, It's when people "Like" their own comments and posts
Oh my goodness this was great! Short, sweet and to the point. This is also a pet peeve of mine, you posted it, you obviously like it right?
This is by far my favorite half of the poem. It just SOUNDS so irritated and a little sardonic. Very well done and sorry for the short review!But if there is one thing that irritates me the most, It's when people "Like" their own comments and posts
Oh my goodness this was great! Short, sweet and to the point. This is also a pet peeve of mine, you posted it, you obviously like it right?
This is by far my favorite half of the poem. It just SOUNDS so irritated and a little sardonic. Very well done and sorry for the short review!But if there is one thing that irritates me the most, It's when people "Like" their own comments and posts
Hello!
Stegosaurus here for a review!
This is a funny poem. I think most people could relate to it since most people have written a poem and tried to do the things that you have written in here. Also it is short; most short poems are the hardest to do find mistakes (to me that is) yet if you read between the lines, you see the meaning and the corrections.
For this review, I am going by stanzas (which is four stanza or lines.. or something):
Some people hate rhymes, others despise their absence
Some people hate it when I try to use various accents
But if there is one thing that irritates me the most
It's when people "Like" their own comments and posts
Hello Candy!
This is my first review ever, so bare with me please O_O
Let me start by say that I usually don't like shorter poems like this, unless there is some little punch line or twist that I can be like "AH I see what you did there." Your poem had that, so kudos to you.
I love how you sort of nailed a few types of readers who view some writing with negativity. For instance:
"Some people hate rhymes, others despise their absence,"
That second one you described... yep that's me...
"Some people hate it when I try to use various accents."
Eheheh even though I'm not one of those people (yes I think adding accents shows personality and tone in poems), I still appreciate that you pointed it out.
"But if there is one thing that irritates me the most / It's when people "Like" their own comments and posts."
See I didn't even realize that you even liked your own poem until someone else did below (SHOUTOUT TO MERGSWORD AHHH!). So I thought that you were really clever to do that. It was clever, and I enjoy it when people are clever and witty.
The only thing is that (even though I know this is supposed to be a short poem) I wanted another stanza. Things that are that short seem to lack something for me? Maybe I want you to get into the nitty gritty and keep SHOWING me more and GIVING me more than just four lines. Point out to me more people that specifically hate certain things about poetry and publishing their own things and stuff. But even then, it is your poem and you made it short for a reason.
Keep it up 4/5
Hello CandyWizard!
It's MergSword here with a review!
I absolutely loved this poem. It's humorous, and really short, which makes it easy on readers.
I read few poems that rhyme, which is why I'm a fan of this, because hey, what's a humorous poem without a rhyme, it's like peanut butter without jelly, it just really doesn't feel complete.
To me it seems like we get few humorous poems, here and there sure we do, but I think we should definetley get a few new humorous poems, like this one.
I had to reread the line and poem a few times to comprehend what the lien meant. Then I finally figured it out. You don't like this. As in you didn't click like. But wait, clever boy, you did like your own work!
I really don't get the various accents part, was I supposed to read that line in an accent?
Anyway you did a great job! Hooray for humorous poems! Keep on writing! And stay cool!
~MergSword
Hi CandyWizard!
I really liked your poem! Mostly because it was so short and catchy. Its really easy to read and compared to other poems which are like 5 pages long, this one doesn't discouraged readers from reading until the end.... It also gets your point across a lot more effectively, although I guess loads of people say you can't exactly express everything you want to in such a short poem.
Anyway, I like the rhyming, especially since it's just 4 lines long; it really ties it together.
I found the poem really funny and witty - because of the overall message I guess and I really loved the way it referred directly to poetry and writing etc... which made it even funnier because this was a poem in itself. On a completely other perspective - I guess I kind of saw this as a metaphor for life itself. People hate each other because "things" they do are annoying, like the "various accents" you referred to, and the difference in opinions that you come across. But the last line is great, because it brings to surface the truth of the shallowness of people, and how desperate we all are to appear liked and wanted I guess. But that was just my own interpretation... I don't know how you meant this poem to sound like.
If there was one thing I wasn't mad on, it was the title. I don't exactly get it and I don't think it fits with the wittiness of the poem.
Really liked it overall!
Tick tock
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